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IELTS Task 1: On road transport in a number od European countries


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Feb 20, 2014   #1
The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first and second charts reveal the distance per year which is faced by traveler with some kinds of mean transport, while the third chart indicates the time in minute per day.

The overall car is the favorite transport which is used by European to do a travelling. Moreover, the highest amount of distance is held by tourist from Denmark.

First of all, Spain and Germany people spend their leisure time to travel by car per person with distance nearly 10.000 kilometres per year. However, EU Average takes place 10.000 kilometres per year/ per person who does a journey by the same mean of transport. Standing in contrast, Britons, Italians and France people record the amount of distance to travel by car per person over 10.000 kilometres and Denmark reach a peak with approximately 12.500 kilometres per year.

Looking more closely at the second chart illustrates the data of difference form of transport. There are; bus, train, metro and bike which are usually used by travelers in Europe. Britons and France inhabitants occupy the lowest distance of travelling per person just under 1.000 kilometres per year. Nevertheless, each person in Germany, Spain and EU Average gains above 1.000 kilometres per year and Italian person takes place almost doubled than that amount of distance in United Kingdom and France. Finally, Denmark has the highest amount of distance which gets over 3000 kilometres per year and this amount is almost doubled than that Italy.

A more detailed look at the third graph reveals that all modes spend a difference time in minutes per day. All modes in Italy which is used by traveler have the lowest amount of time with 22 minutes per day, while Spain, France, Denmark and EU Average record the total of time more than 30 minutes per day. Moreover, Germany and United Kingdom has the same time which applies per day with nearly 50 minutes.

Clearly, travelers in Denmark need all kinds of vehicles to pick them up in the tourism places but the commuting time in Denmark is not taking more than 40 minutes per day. Moreover, the majority of European countries are still comfort to use car for traveling.




Pahan 1 / 1,908 553  
Feb 20, 2014   #2
The first and second charts reveal the distance per yearwhich is faced by traveler with some kinds of mean transport, while the third chart indicates the time in minute per day.

.... The highlighted parts are not delivering your idea clearly. You need to rephrase them :(
It's better to paraphrase your title. Specify the type of charts (in this case they are bar charts)
The bar charts provide information on road transport in seven European countries.

The overall car is the favorite transport which is used by European to do a travelling.

Overall, car had been the favorite mode of transportation by European countries
Your diagram is too small for me to see the details of the graphs :(


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