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'Running Dream' book - setting description


ariuka1224 1 / -  
Nov 22, 2015   #1
Beginning of the book, Running Dream, it took place in hospital room. Then it mostly took place in her house and school. As she enters the house she smells onions, oregano, and garlic-her mom's spaghetti sauce. Sherlock lets out a happy bark and Jessica is happy to be home. Her room was use to be in last room on the right upstairs, but now her room is downstairs in the family room. If the story didn't took place in at her home, it wouldn't show how much their parents love her and worry about her. Also it wouldn't show that she feels comfortable at her home. At school everyone welcomes her and happy to see her. At the students parking lot, Shandall who was in the track team, squeals and hugs her. She is happy to see that she was missed by her friends and teacher. If Jessica didn't go to school, she wouldn't meet Rosa, she wouldn't get her running leg without her track team friends, and she wouldn't of start running again.
irhame 52 / 50 25  
Nov 22, 2015   #2
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vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 23, 2015   #3
Ariuka, you are only supposed to be describing the setting of the story and yet to somehow managed to also describe the emotions of the characters and some story plots. Correct me if I am wrong but I do believe that those aspects are not part of the instruction that you gave. Anyway, I edited your statement below. I believe it works much better now.

The beginning of the book "The Running Dream" took place in a hospital room. The scenes then change from there to mostly the school or home of the lead character. As the lead characters, Jessica, enters the house, she smells a mix of onions, oregano, and garlic, here mom is cooking her famous spaghetti sauce. Her dog, Sherlock, lets out a happy bark as he is reunited with his master. Jessica then goes to her room, which used to be on the right upstairs, but is now downstairs in the family room. If the book had been set elsewhere at the start, the love of Jessica's parents for her would not have been presented in the story. Neither would their worry about her. Jessica is for the most part, comfortable in her home.

At school, Jessica is depicted as being loved by her classmates as her friend Shandall, who is on the track team, gleefully greets her with a hug and a squeal. Had Jessica not missed school, she would not have met Rosa, wouldn't have gotten her running legs back without her track team friends, and she would not have run again.


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