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The scientists should be responsible but also appreciated by the prominence of their discoveries


hypersis 7 / 24 7  
Oct 21, 2015   #1
Do you agree or disagree: Scientists should be responsible for negative impacts of their discoveries

In this age, with the advent of technology, many new discoveries have been made and new advancements in different scientific fields have emerged. However, like many social, political and cultural matters, science has its own benefits and drawbacks. Thus, scientists should be appreciated by the prominence of their discoveries; and on the other hand, should be responsible for the negative repercussions of their inventions and scientific researches. My perspective toward this issue is that scientists should be particularly cognizant of the potentially harmful implications of their discoveries, as they might lead to many problems including: detrimental diseases and mass destructive weapons

Many unknown diseases have become widely spread out, because of the ignorance of a scientist doing research on a dangerous fields. To illustrate, there is always a possibility that an unknown and primitive virus can infect a laboratory mouse. This virus can be transmitted easily to human through the contact between mouse and human skin. Certainly, the virus can kill a dozen people with one shot, and therefore, the scientist is responsible for murder and should be held responsible.Specifically, biologists who are conducting researches on the field of biology might find a novel way to produce, for example, a specific enzyme to catalyze a metabolites process. However, if this enzyme is injected to human veins, might cause several tremendous side effects. Therefore, the biologists should take responsibility, warn the public of those side effects and find ways to prevent or reduce the severe influences of such discoveries.

Human lives are always in danger of mass destructive weapons, many of which have been invented by irresponsible physicists. All complex weapons, missiles and guns are once had peaceful purposes, but later they have brought many destruction and damages to human life on earth. For instance, at first nuclear atoms and enriched Uranium have been exploited for peaceful goals, but later they have been used for other perilous intentions, including invention of atomic bombs. Atomic bombs were used in World War II and resulted in many destruction in Japan. However, if an individual who has discovered nuclear atoms thought about the devastating consequences of his invention, he could take some effective steps to prevent this discovery to become a huge killer weapon.

All things considered, scientists should be aware and responsible of the different implications that they discoveries bring to people's lives. Such implications could be as harmful as unknown viruses or be as destructive as mass weapons.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Oct 21, 2015   #2
Zara, I take my hat off to you. This is an excellent example of how to write an opinion essay. the introduction is flawless. It covered the bases from the positive to the negative in a thoroughly discussed manner prior to the presentation of your thesis. A thesis that thoroughly proves your ability to not only understand the question posed, but that you are capable of explaining how you understand the question. Good job!

The vocabulary that you used in the essay is complex enough to allow the examiner to deduce for himself that you are a highly intellectual person whose ability to speak and write in the English language is above an ordinary ESL's ability. There can be no doubt that you are highly familiar withe language and you are able to create coherent thoughts using it.

However, I noticed that there are a few grammatical errors in the essay that could be addressed. It is so minimal that if this were an actual test, it would actually not affect the final outcome of your score. For the purpose of a writing exercise though, I need to point those words out to you.

Par. 1:
In this age, with WITH the advent of technology
However, like many social, political and cultural matters, science has PRODUCED its own benefits and drawbacks.
Thus, scientists should be appreciated by FOR the prominence of their discoveries; and on the other hand, should be responsible

Par. 2:
Many unknown diseases have become widely spread out,
scientist doing research on a IN dangerous fields.
To illustrate, there THERE is always a possibility that an unknown and primitive virus can infect a laboratory mouse.
This virus can be transmitted easily to humanS through the contact between mouse and human skin.
Certainly, DEPENDING UPON THE TYPE OF TRANSFERENCE, the virus can kill a dozen people with one shot
the scientist is responsible for murder THE DEATHS OF PEOPLE and should be held responsible.
Specifically, biologists BIOLOGISTS who are conducting researches on IN the field of biology might find a novel way to produce
, for example , a specific enzyme to catalyze a metabolites process.
However, if this enzyme is injected INto human veins, IT might cause several tremendous side effects.

Par. 3:
Human lives are always in danger of mass destructive weapons FROM THE USE OF WEAPONS OF MASS DESTRUCTION
All complex weapons, missiles and guns are once had peaceful purposes,
but later they THESE have brought ABOUT many MUCH destruction and damages to human life on earth.
For instance, at firs t nuclear atoms and enriched Uranium have been exploited for peaceful goals,
but later they THESE WERE have been used for other perilous intentions, including THE invention of atomic bombs.
Atomic bombs were used in World War II and resulted in many THE destruction in OFJapan. However, if IF THE an individual who has discovered nuclear atoms

he could HAVE takeN some effective steps to prevent this discovery to FROM become BECOMING a huge killer weapon.

Par. 4:
All things considered, scientists should be aware and responsible of the different implications that they THEIR discoveries bring to people's lives. Such implications could be as harmful as unknown viruses or be as destructive as mass weapons.

* I think that you should have one paragraph that details the positive contributions of scientists just to balance out the discussion. As it is though, this is already a well developed essay.
OP hypersis 7 / 24 7  
Oct 21, 2015   #3
Louisa, I don't know how to thank u :) Your points on my essay was really invaluable and I became aware of mistakes I made, many of which I didn't notice before :) -


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