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IELTS-the search for alternative energy cause environmental damage.Agree or disagree?



sobin 12 / 24  
Apr 14, 2011   #1
Q:One day worlds oil & gas reserves will ran out.The search for alternative energy sources like wind power,solar power,bursnig waste are causing as much environmental damage as the oil& nuclear sources they intended to replace

-How far do you agree with this latter argument?
-What possible benefits do the alternative sources bring?or what damage do they cause?
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The developmant of the world depend upon the usage of natural resourses.Mankind used this enegy to conquer the world.Eventually, they feared about the availability of this natural resources.They did think about an alternative resourse to create the same power to maintain their technological development.But in this era some of the people think the alternate energy sources cause as much environmental damage as the oil and nuclear sources do.when some one hear about this argument won't think about the reason behind this statement?They do!

The main drawbacks of this sources are the excess usage of land scapes.It destros the beauty and equilibrium of the nature.Because of this projects animals loose its shelters.That adversly effect on its existance.other than that the pollution created by such alternate energy resources create a harmfull environment to live.For instance,burnig of waste materials to create energy release toxic gases into the environment.The use of rare earth metals come next.most of these energy sources need large batteries to store its the power.the companies use rare earth metals to increase its storage capcity of the batteries.China has already brought regulations over the mining of rare earth metals.Moreover the cost to complete such a project is enormous.

However, the alternate energy sources help to produce large amount of energy without using valuable resources.This is the only way produce enegy in industrial scale for the in dustries and house holds.The scientists hope to bring the natural damage down by using the new technologies in the alternetive enenrgy projects.

in conclusion a susbstitute nature friendly energy resource is essential for the modern world.The development of alternte enegy sources will eventually bring the use of nuclear and oil power sources down in countries.Because of the reasons mentoned above i agree with the latter statement.

Scientiana 12 / 42  
Apr 15, 2011   #2
I don't agree with your idea in the second sentence because I think alternative energy sources are good for the environment and they are not harmful. Moreover, I think your opinion about the alternative energy sources is unclear.

Do you agree that the search for alternative energy sources cause much harm than oil and nuclear?

Also, there are many spelling mistakes in your essay. Keep practicing!
Neeta 5 / 21  
Apr 15, 2011   #3
Agreement Essay- is it important to write little bit about the other side of agreement?
ekekek 25 / 51  
Apr 15, 2011   #4
sobin~~Annika had corrected a lot~ I just give some advices~~

After reading your essay, I think you wrote too casual~ Personally, I don't think it suits for academic writing.
Besides, the link between each sentence is ambiguous, as a reader, I have to spend more time in understanding what you wanted to convey.

Pratice more~ Fighting~ ^0^
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 16, 2011   #5
The development of the world depends upon the usage of natural resourses.

The main drawbacks of this sources are the excess usage of land scapes.It destros the beauty and equilibrium of the nature.----Use a spell checker to improve your spelling. Also, when you write this sentence you should name the specific sources of energy. Are you talking about windmills? Solar panels?

Because of these projects animals loose lose their shelters.----Look at all the changes I made here.

That adversly effect affects its existence.

Capitalize the first word of every sentence.

The burning releases...
For instance,burnig of waste materials to create energy releases toxic gases into the environment.

Because of the reasons mentoned above i agree with the latter statement.---I think you should write this sentence in a different way. Do not say you agree with the latter statement. Say your opinion clearly.

:-)

Please practice all these corrections! You need to work on your grammar. The meaning is very clear, though, and you write effectively. You just have a lot of grammar errors, and you need a lot of REPETITION to learn to type with correct grammar.
OP sobin 12 / 24  
Apr 21, 2011   #6
i think its important to tell something about the other part of topic


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