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not to separate influence of parents & school on child; useful member of society



BINGBINGLIANG 5 / 9  
Apr 1, 2014   #1
How to cultivate children into a good member of society? From some individuals' perspective, parents play an important role in teaching their offspring in daily life. While the others hold the opinion that school should take the obligation to make each child a useful people in the future. As far as I see it , the influence unwise to separate the influence is equally important in moulding one's characteristic and behavior.

A good member of society must behave gently and elegantly in public. For most people ,they learn the right behavior from their family. For instance, they will simulate their parents actions like being friendly to others, dressing neatly , smiling warmly and eating meals quietly. An elegant person certainly comes from a well-educated family. I remember when I was young, my mother always told me to walk slightly and other behaviors. Therefore, it is needless to say that the role of parents in fostering a child's behavior is crucial.

On the other hand, the effects of school should not be ignored. A child spends most of his or her time with teachers and mates. They acquire a lot of useful knowledge by attending a variety of classes like literature, mathematics, music ,physics and drawing. They could communicate with each other and deal with the interrelationship with capabilities obtained by literature. And music and drawing facilitate them experiencing the beauty of life. Taking part in activities in physical class can teach them how to work together as a team. The most important is school teaches children basical skills to seek a good job when they grow up. Obviously, the influence of school on children's education is also huge.

To sum up ,it is unwise to separate the influence of parents and school on fostering a child into a useful person in society. Neither of the function can be substituted by the other one.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 1, 2014   #2
It's good if you included the prompt in this thread so that we know exactly what it expects from you and we can align our comments more with the task requirements :)

How to cultivate children into a good members of society? From some individuals' perspective, parents play an important role in teaching their offspring in daily life.to be so. While the others hold the opinion that school should take theobligationthat responsibility to make each child a useful people in the future.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Apr 1, 2014   #3
As far as I see it , the influence of parents and school is equally important in mouldingmolding one's characteristics and behavior.

I remember when I was young, my mother always told me to walk slightly and other behaviors.

... what does this mean? "Walk slightly"? It is not very clear :(
. A child spends most of his or her time in school among thewith teachers and school mates.
Overall, this is a good essay. You have a good understanding about the structure :)
fikri 5 / 310  
Apr 1, 2014   #4
this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement = this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .
OP BINGBINGLIANG 5 / 9  
Apr 1, 2014   #5
Thanks a lot,I have attended a training class to learn how to write a perfect essay.It has some positive functions.As to the sentence "I remember when I was young ,...",Can I change the word slightly into sliently? You know I want to raise some exampkes of my own experience.Unluckly,I lack the skills.So I need ur help very much.Thanks again.I feel wonderful to have a lot of friends all over the world like you.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Apr 1, 2014   #6
Sorry bingbingliang. I didn't notice. Your sentence is already right. It is not a comma splice.

I remember (that) when I was young, my mother always told me... .

Aha, this phrase...

to walk slightly and other behaviors.

Surely, I don't catch what you are saying here. If you could, please rewrite

Thanks
OP BINGBINGLIANG 5 / 9  
Apr 3, 2014   #7
I mean when i was young , my mother taught me a lot good behaviors .But o really don't know how to write it on my essay.I will appreciate it if you coule raise some advisable samples.thanks a lot.


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