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Sir Ken Robinson, in his presentation on TED Talk, discussed about education that kills creativity



sasariri 17 / 22  
Oct 27, 2016   #1
TED Summary : Do Schools Kill Creativity?

Sir Ken Robinson, in his presentation on TED Talk, discussed the issue about education that kills creativity. It was evident that there were a lot of extraordinary human creativity in world. He narrowed down about education systems in world that have hierarchy with the range of subject like in first position there are mathematics and language, the second place is social and sciences and the last is arts. He did not agree with educational systems that think being wrong as a worst matter, while it was initial step to be a creative. In addition, in this modern era, people have tendency to enrol school to find a job, not to receive knowledge and parents give too much pressure to children in order to make bright future for their children. He also mentioned diverse, dynamic and distinct as three main parts about intelligence. In his conclusion, they invited audience to re-clarify the education systems to let children grow belongs to their age and their ability although future is not predictable.

Mathew8 5 / 11  
Oct 27, 2016   #2
Hello Sasariri
i have a twice of advice to you

... human creativity in (the) world
education systems in (the) world
.....i think you should use article (the) before noun world

people have tendency to enrol school to find a job
....your sentence not logic, maybe better if you add some explanation. like "... to find a job in the future"


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