Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
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It is true that citizens have unfit the way of life in modern era which increases the number of people who died because of eating unhealthy meals. Some people believe that advanced technology give easy way to obtain fast food everywhere. Otherwise, others think a lot of method for staying fit today and it depends on the people commitment to make an effort for a healthy lifestyle.
To begin with, an unhealthy lifestyle becomes a particular of serious issue nowadays. And some people think that it is quite hard to eat fresh food or do physical movement in new world. Moreover, a period of life in advanced technology gives plenty of facilities such as, delivery food by fast food restaurant and eCommerce meals online. And these are easy way to have health problems and make human lazy to go outside. Furthermore, another facility from new innovation also make people spending much time in front of TV, Smartphone and computer, so they are less by working out in a gym and outdoor activities.
Nowadays, a healthy lifestyle has become an essential thing for people who expect to live longer and healthy. And others people argue that there are several ways to stay fit such as, cut down on unhealthy foods, make an effort to do exercise every twice a week frequently and increase fruits and vegetable intake regularly. However, people who prefer to keep fit in lifestyle have to commits with themselves to avoid unhealthy lifestyle.
To sum up, it is easy to have a healthy lifestyle in modern era by eating balance nutrition, eliminate junk food and doing exercise as long as the people can commits with these activities but in my experience there are many ways to have a fit body and healthy mind such as less stress, sleep well at night and do yoga at midnight. It might be very useful to solve health problems.
Hi Eve01.
It is my pleasure to give you some correction
It is true that citizens have unfit (Put noun because fit is adjective, example, unfit condition) the way of life in modern era
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Best regard
Hi Eva, first of all, as I go through your essay, I believe you have made a well managed answer to the task at hand, you have a direct response and you did what was asked of you to write. In general, you have pointed each side of the puzzle that made your conclusion strong. Having said that, I do agree that, nowadays, it's getting tougher to be healthy, there are several factors that gets your mind off of eating healthy and living healthy, however, it is always your will that matters in the end, your choice to be healthy and be fit in every way possible.
Moreover, as much as I believe your essay has a very positive result and highlighted the necessary points to address the prompt, I have a few suggestions to enhance your essay.
Conclusion
- in this modern era by eating balance nutrition,
- the peopleyou can commits with these
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- to have abe fit body and healthy
- mind such asby observing less stress, sleeping well at night
- and do yoga at midnight. It might be very useful to solve health problems as soon as they arise or better yet prevent them, as they say, prevention is better than cure .
I hope the above remarks help in your revision.
