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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever?


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Jun 16, 2022   #1

community should be based on the regulations



To this day, society is still in control of its order, so civilians do not allow to do everything they want. From my perspective, I totally agree with this statement.

To begin with, what holds the most significant part is the government's authority to remain in our peaceful and protected life. The number of crimes would increase if there weren't any governance. For instant, according to New York Times, the robbery rates in Brazil decreased by 56 per cent after crime prevention was launched in 2000 by the politician.

The improvement of the environment is also noteworthy in consideration due to the environmental rules. Obviously, when these stipulations were declared, people were likely to have enough awareness about our nature. Moreover, we find it easier to encourage civilians to go green. For example, as claimed by BBC News, the number of deforestation was reduced by 34 per cent in Russia in 1998 thanks to campaigns which prevented soil erosion.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that our community should be based on the regulations which create limitations for individuals.
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Jun 17, 2022   #2
The prompt restatement totally messes the point. When the mention of "rule of law" was committed in the rewording, the writer created a totally different topic presentation. The lack of proper topic presentation has made the writer's . baseless, confusing, and weak.

The writer cannot get a passing score because of the automatic failing grade the essay will receive. He severely underwrote the essay at only 180/250 words. Since word count deductions will apply overall, the preliminary score will be failing. The reason this happened is because of the rushed and little developed discussion paragraphs. He should have expanded on the discussion statements made rather than abruptly ending the paragraph, without additional explanations or justifications.He would have at least received partial scores for meeting the word requirement even if the discussion is irrelevant.


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