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Society should make efforts to save endangered species if humans affected



Namangarg147 1 / 4  
May 17, 2020   #1
Hi everyone,

Can anyone please review my essay.

Protection of the endangered species on the Earth



Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Planet Earth is the home of different kinds of species. Nature has provided us different kinds of flora and fauna to flourish. But due to the human intervention in the environment, nature is going into abrupt changes. Lots of activities by human involving poaching, global warming has disturbed the ecological balance. The Government is trying to apply certain types of policy to mitigate the effect of humans on nature but do we, as a society are trying enough to preserve our nature. Society should make several efforts to save the endangered species. Extinction of the species can be related to any of the factors. It can be due to human intervention or natural cause.

In the present day, society is very egocentric. People want to gain as much profit as they can to make money due to which species are going to a potential risk of extinction. For Instance, the human is killing elephants for their tusk, killing tigers for their skin which makes a profit in the market due to which all these species are going to a high extinction rate. Based on recent research, the population of tigers has an abrupt change going down from 1000 to 100. Also, in the current scenario, forests are getting converted into buildings due to which animals have lost their shelter. As the species losing their shelter, there is a possibility of them entering the residential areas which again leads to killing species and make them endangered. Therefore, it is the responsibility of society that before cutting down any forest, proper measures should be taken to provide habitat for the animals of that forest. It is the responsibility of society to saver mother nature. The endangered species should be kept in places where they can be safe and get the type of food the species generally rely on. Special care should be taken to avoid any loss for the endangered species.

Additionally, pollution is also one of the major factors which are affecting a lot of species. People are throwing industrial waste in water which is polluting water and water species are dying. There are several instances where plastic was the reason for a dead sea animal. When research has been done in this area, it was found that there were tons of plastic in the water which is creating so many health issues for the sea animals to survive. Due to human intervention, these species are at the edge of their extinction. Several measures should be taken by society to avoid these circumstances. The use of plastic should be banned as plastic doesn't degrade for thousands of years which can lead to the extinction of several species who are not able to adapt to the new living environment. Society should be aware of their surroundings and try not to affect nature due to their interventions.

Also, global warming can be one of the reasons for endangered species which is happening due to the overuse of natural resources. Temperature is rising day by day which is causing icebergs to melt. Several species are not able to adjust with the higher temperature and thus dying at a higher rate. Global warming is one of the humans created disasters due to the overuse of nature. Society should take several measures in this area to reduce global warming by reducing pollution, growing as many trees as we can to protect the environment and thus save the species.

In conclusion, based on several facts and research, it can be concluded that human intervention has done a lot of damage to the plants and animals, and thus, it is the responsibility of society to revive nature. Aware society can make an observable change in the environment and can save lots of endangered species.

hhoaianhh2905 2 / 2  
May 17, 2020   #2
In the present day, society is very egocentric. People want to gain as much profit as they can to make money due to which species are going to a potential risk of extinction.

I think it should be due to that species.....
OP Namangarg147 1 / 4  
May 17, 2020   #3
@hhoaianhh2905
Thanks a lot for the comment. Should I work on my content as well?
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15466  
May 17, 2020   #4
You should definitely work on your content. The main reason being, you did not discuss the factors are indicated in the prompt requirement. Your thesis statement is faulty and unrelated to the original discussion. For comparison purposes:

Topic: Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Your Topic: Government is trying to apply certain types of policy ...intervention or natural cause.

You did not properly restate the prompt, establish the discussion reasons, and state what the suggested animal preservation policy is, along with your opinion as required by the discussion:

Efforts to save low animal species facing extinction have been proposed for several decades now. One of the newest policies to be proposed is to prepare preservation plans for the fauna only if it can be proved that the low species rate is being caused by the actions of people. I find that this proposal to be moot because it has already been proven that the actions of man have a direct hand in the eradication of various animalia .

After clearly restating the discussion points and indicating your position, you can begin to present your reasoning discussion points. The point of the essay is to prove that the potential policy is faulty due to several underlying circumstances. You have not proven that point, nor have you rebutted any potential opposition to your point of view, as required by the discussion. The essay does not focus on the policy but rather the reasons for animal extinction, which was not the point of the essay. The discussion wanted you to prove or disprove the soundness of the policy based on the validity of the claim it is making. You failed to do that in this essay.

You have to make sure that you clearly understand what the discussion points, reason for discussion, and discussion expectations are so that you can clearly present an analytical point of view in your presentation.
OP Namangarg147 1 / 4  
May 17, 2020   #5
@Holt
Thank you so much for your response. I will definitely work on my content and post it again for review.


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