A society without school and education system is like a body without brain

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
High schools should allow students to study the course that students want to study.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

These days, education plays a significant role in society and countries, a society without school and education system is a body without brain; furthermore, different people have different Interests even from their childhood; for example, some field of study in high school were easy for me, but some were difficult which I didn't like them. Therefore, high schools should let students choose the field of study that they want, because if students likes some field of study they will work hard to learn it and their ability to understand it is much more powerful.

It is said that information is power. True saying indeed! But the way that people can learn more and have more information is to practice and I strongly believe that, practice makes perfect; furthermore, when we like something or field of study, we spent much more time and effort indeed. For example, when I was in high school my favorites was physics that I spent hours each day without any rest but I couldn't choose to spent more time on it and I had to learn religious stuff; consequently, I think if I like some field of study, I would work hard for it.

Interests playing a significant role in our life, field of job, study etc. For instance, my field of study is robotics now, when I was younger most of the times I use to watch TV-series which refers to science and robotics, like Transformers, Iron man etc. I think our Interest belongs to our feeling which have a connection to our understanding and imagination; consequently, it is the point that when we like some field of study maybe refers to our imagination and understanding about that field which build our demand for it.

Generally speaking, I agree with the idea that high schools should allow students to learn and study the courses that they want, furthermore, schools must help them to choose their interests.

You should check you grammar more carefully.

Sina, while you present a good argument for the essay, I believe that you can use some other real world and academically acceptable reasons for allowing students to study courses that they are interested in and want to study in high school. Ask the reader to take into consideration that in the United States, there are specialized high schools for technology, the arts, and other field specific disciplines that allow the high school student to take their regular classes with specialized courses that will give them the proper foundation for their future college degree. This better prepares the student for the rigors and demands of college because they begin to immerse themselves into the college courses early on and thus, develop a more mature and deeper understanding of what and where their course interests could take them. This makes their decision as to what course to study in college easier than it can be for most students. Their regular high schools also offer some AP or advanced placement classes which provides the same college preparatory courses to help ease them into the college life transition. I hope you can consider these aspects of evidence and supporting arguments for the revision of your essay :-)

Firstly, congratulations the ideas are great.
Secondly, you have to expand your vocabulary a little bit more.

Hi manutd911, firstly thank you for your time, secondly I have to ask some questions to learn points;
1. What is the different between "that" and "what" here? why I have to use "what"? Is it grammatically?
2. Did you have time to read whole text? Were there any other mistakes?? (I'm pleased to know all of them)

Hi Vangiespen, Thank you for your time, I think brain storm for this essay is not good enough as you mentioned and I'll care about it more than before, but frankly speaking, I don't have information about United States high schools, Im international student who wants to apply for MA, and Im working on my essay writing for GRE and TOEFL ;)

(Send reply if there are any other points please)

Hi Vns9x Firstly, Thank you for your time, I think my essay is not rich enough for using advanced vocabulary and I have to work on it ;)

Secondly, I didn't get your goal by "help with mine" sentences, these sentences are examples of using different way of writing in different fields of essays??(I'm new in this community)