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SPORT FOR CHILDREN INSTEAD OF COMPUTER GAMES



annahatef 30 / 8  
Dec 16, 2015   #1
It is better to teach sports to young people at school as an alternative to playing computer games at home. Why is it important? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

Sport is beneficial for human



These days students do not interest to do sport considerably. If they are encouraged to do some physical activities, students do not spend their time on computer games. The reason why it is very important that the number of hours spent on sports should be high among young people is that sport helps to have healthy body.

To begin with, students need to do sport. young generation's bodies are growing, sport helps to grow physically very well. Their muscles become strong and some saturated fats are not stored in young people's bodies. Also, when children play computer games, they just set down on the chair without any physical movement. Therefore, they loss their muscles for long run. In my opinion, it is the first stage of many lifestyle disease, such as obesity, diabetes.

Moreover, if student play some sports, they do not follow some bad habits. Smoking is the most popular habit among adolescence. By playing some sports, young generation reluctant to smoke. Also, by having good shape and high level of fitness makes increasing the self confidence among children. So, young adult can communicate with peers very well.

Moreover, doing computer games has many demerits. These games introduce violent to children. The most back ground of these games is fight. Therefore, violence increases rapidly among children, since the first solution of various problems is physical attack or arguing. As a consequence, anxiety and stress are common feature among children.

In conclusion, doing sports has many merits such having high level of fitness, decreasing violence, some pressure and helping to reduce attraction to some bad habits.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Dec 16, 2015   #2
Anna, this is a personal opinion essay. Therefore, you have to present your personal opinion in the introductory statement by using the terms "My opinion is, I believe that, My idea is, I consider ..." and a host of other opening pronoun phrases that will signify that only your opinion and examples will be discussed in the essay. Making your opinion clear from the very beginning, by indicating it as a sentence or part of the statement, will show the reviewer that you have not only a clear understanding of the instructions, but also that you took the time to consider the discussion presented before you.

These days students do not SHOW AN interest IN sportS considerably . If they THEREFORE, THEY NEED TO BE are encouraged to do some physical activities IN ORDER TO LESSEN , students do not spend their time SPENT PLAYING on computer games. I BELIEVE THAT T The reason why it THIS is very important IS that the number of hours spent on sports should be high among young people is that sport BECAUSE IT helps to THE YOUNG DEVELOP A have healthy body.

To begin with I WOULD LIKE TO START BY SAYING, students need to do sportS. IN ORDER TO HELP THEIR young generation's bodies are growing, PROPERLY DEVELOP. sport helps to grow physically very well. Their muscles become strong and some saturated fats are not stored EXCESS FATS ARE BURNED in young people's bodies. Also, when children play computer games, they just set SIT down on IN the chair without any physical movement. Therefore, they loss their muscles LOSE MUSCLE DENSITY AND STRENGTH IN THE fo r long run. In my opinion, it is the first stage of many lifestyle diseaseS, such as obesity, AND diabetes.

Moreover, if studentS play some sports, they do not follow some FALL INTO bad habits. Smoking is the most popular habit among adolescence. By playing some sports, young generation THEY BECOME reluctant to smoke. Also, by having good shape and A high level of fitness makes increasing , THE the self confidence among children INCREASES. So, young adult can communicate with peers very well.

Moreover, doing computer games has many demerits. These ADMITTEDLY, COMPUTER games introduce violent VIOLENCE to children. The most back ground of these games is fight MOST VIDEO GAMES ARE BASED UPON PHYSICAL VIOLENCE. Therefore, violence increases rapidly among children, since the first solution of THE GAME TO various problems is physical attack or arguing. As a consequence, anxiety and stress are common feature BECOME COMMON OCCURRENCES among children.

In conclusion, doing sports has many merits such having A high level of fitness, decreasing violence, some EASING pressure ON CHILDREN, and helping to reduce attraction to some bad habits.


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