IELTS: Steps in the hiring process

The diagram shows the steps in the hiring process at a large corporation.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates the process on how a large company hires an employee.

On the whole, it can be observed that a step-by-step process must be followed before an employee can be permanently hired in a big company.

Initially, the applicant must fill in and submit his application form to the hiring personnel and then, he is required to be present in the initial interview to determine his status upon meeting the basic requirements for qualification. If he did not meet the needs to be qualified, he is then declined of the job employment. On the other hand, if the applicant met the basic qualifications, he will be scheduled to take a standardized test of skills ability, which he has to pass in order to be able to proceed to the next step.

Once the applicant has completed and earned an adequate grade from the test, he will be accepted to temporarily work in the company for six months, which will be followed by an evaluation of the on-probation employee's work performance.

After the evaluation, the result would be revealed, which will then be the basis of the company's decision if the applicant will be accepted or not. If the evaluation shows no recommendations, the employee will be removed from the job. However, if the result shows a positive evaluation with good recommendation, he will be offered a lasting job position in the company.

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When writing introduction, it should be two or more sentences to call it a paragraph.

For instance,

The diagram illustrates the process on how a large company hires an employee. On the whole, it can be observed that a step-by-step process must be followed before an employee can be permanently hired in a big company.

They said, using personal pronouns are quite unbiased. You may substitute it with an individual , a person or an applicant instead. :-)

Most of our task 1 introductions are one-liners but I'll raise this issue to my teacher though. I cannot add up the 'on the whole...' part because that is my 'overall statement'.


The IDP teacher and our instructor said that it is okay to use pronouns to represent the subject but it has to be a 'he' for it encompasses all genders. It is also applicable in writing task 2. But my work here is quite redundant in the usage of 'he'. I should work on that. :D

Sorry it's biased not unbiased. I'll try to research regarding the use of personal pronouns in IELTS but I think that comes from one of our retired IELTS examiner.