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Less stress, more harmony; is it better to live in small towns or big cities?


riyak 6 / 13 1  
Jan 10, 2013   #1
My preference would depend on what I want out of life during the period with respect to which I have to choose between living in a small town or big city. I have lived in a small town during the first 18 years of my life and thereafter in several big cities till now. And I prefer it exactly that way for the following reasons-

I prefer life in a small town for childhood days till early youth as the environment is most suitable for growing up. For eg, small towns have close knit communities who take joint responsibility for the holistic well being of the children in the community. As any small town in a developed country would have good education system and extracurricular activities, children growing up in small town do not, as such, face any disadvantages. Additionally, the pace of life being slower and more relaxed, children grown up with less stress and more in harmony with nature which is conducive to their overall development. On the other hand in big bustling cities,although children may have slightly better schooling and other opportunities, big cities are not as relaxed in pace as small towns . This may cause children, in big cities,to be constantly on their toes and hence lead a stressed life.

As an adult, I prefer living in big cities. Youth is the time when one should work the hardest not just to earn but also to excel in one's chosen field. A big city , in my opinion, provides much more opportunities to a professional to excel. Additionally, life in a big city can be best enjoyed during youth when one can maturely handle the stress and fast pace of big city living and at the same time take advantage of the best that big cities have to offer- like opportunity to meet people from world over, trying cuisines from different nations, frequent shows and exhibitions, etc

My preference in later years of life would depend much on what I am looking for in my life. Therefore, my preference in choosing either small town or big city is flexible depending on my own needs and aspirations

abcdefgh 5 / 21 3  
Jan 12, 2013   #2
I prefer to reside in suburb of big city because in the same time I reach to two my goals . to Live in calm and empty area and to have access to better facilities .

To live in calm and empty area is one of the significance my dream. In This environment, usually have less population. The important point for me is that I can live a duplex house with a big and green yard and I have my privacy area and I don't oblige to bear a neighbor who don't know role of apartment.

Basically, main and significance conveniences accumulate in the big city. Such as the best university, the best entertainment, the best education institution, the successful company, the best market. You need for making progress and improvement in your job to are hire in a big and famous company .

Personally, I believe , after coming to an end a busy and hard working day , we are in need to relive our tired and reach to calmness where the house, become far away n the big city..( hello riyak , my nam is nasrin i live in iran . i am about 37 years old and you? )
OP riyak 6 / 13 1  
Jan 13, 2013   #3
suburb of big city is not an option. I guess we cant come up with our own option but must either choose between the two given option or pick both for specific reasons. Btw I am riya from India but live in USA.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 13, 2013   #4
as such, face any disadvantages.

as such, face many disadvantages.

You display excellent writing skills. I guess you are preparing for either IELTS or TOEFL. If that is so, I guess you can aim for a real good score or band. If you intend to post your essays for feed backs try to include the prompt as well. So that we can provide you with more relevant comments. :)
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 13, 2013   #5
I like the way you write. It's very clear and very well constructed.

The only suggestion I have is that your essay might sound better if reduce the length of some of your sentences. For example,

Additionally, life in a big city can be best enjoyed during youth when one can maturely handle the stress and fast pace of big city living and at the same time take advantage of the best that big cities have to offer- like opportunity to meet people from world over, trying cuisines from different nations, frequent shows and exhibitions, etc

This is a big sentence, try to break it down in your own way. :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 18, 2013   #6
hello dumi i am appriciated to check my response to riyak about wether i prefer to live in small towns or big city? i am waiting to read your response.

Hi abcdefgh :D
Well, I think you better open your own thread under this topic to have responses because it is not very fair by riyak - this is riyak's thread :)

Any way, let me highlight some grammar errors for you;

To live in calm and empty area is one of themy significantsignificance my dreams .

one of my dreams/ one of my choices - you are pulling out one from many, so it need to be in plural form :)

In Tt his environment, usually you have less population.

This environment is usually less polluted.
Try simple and easy sentences. Also try to use direct speech :)


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