IELTS: students can learn outside the textbook and classroom with a real working experiences

Some schools send their students to institutions/organizations for a short to do some unpaid work. To what extent is it beneficial to the students and the organizations/institutions?

The purpose of this essay is to discuss what can students and the organizations benefit from the activity that the students sent by their schools to work for companies without salaries. In this essay, I would start by analyzing the advantages for doing this for both students and companies, and then I would draw a conclusion at the end.

To begin with, students can learn invaluable experiences through the period of time working for the institutions they are assigned to. In most school curriculums, the courses are theoretical and often by instructors speaking to students sitting in the classroom. As a result, students might have little idea of the real challenges or the true situation when they enter the workforce after graduation. For this reason, the internship, although without pay, can give them the experiences that money cannot buy.

As for the companies, the unpaid interns can no doubt save some money. In addition, the younger generations can help them generate new ideas as the students are not bound to restricted workload and they tend to have greater imagination, which can be essentially helpful when they are making a new advertisement or slogan. Moreover they can start looking for potential employees and begin the training, therefore save the time and resources for searching new staffs and organizing an orientation.

To sum up, students can learn outside the textbook and classroom with a real working experiences that can be a great opportunity for future job consideration whereas organizations earn much more as they can not only save time and money but also be enlightened by what young people have to say.

This is a great essay, but I just want to mention that you should give a thesis statement in the first paragraph of most essays you write. Do not just tell the reader you will draw a conclusion at the end.

Maybe someone taught you to do it this way, and maybe some people think this way is better, but I want to tell you the way I think it best:

Say it, explain it, and say it again.

In the intro paragraph, tell your conclusion (i.e. the TRUTH you discovered).
In the body of the essay, explain it.
In the end of the essay, say it again in that last paragraph.

:-)

Hi Keven,

This is taught by an IELTS examiner. His reasons for writing like this have something to do with IELTS grading I think. Introduction paragraph doesn't count much so he adviced me not to spend too much time on it. As for not writing a thesis, it is because he thinks that it will be too much repeating. So keep it in the last paragraph would then have something new to write about. (And also because that there are a lot of existing templates written by candidates that were so commonly seen.)

I had some doubts with this kind of way of writing at first since some native speakers (including you) find it strange to organise an essay like this. But in my real IELTS exam, I wrote like this and I got a 7 in writing. So I think it's generally acceptable among the IELTS examiners.