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Why study? 'career preparation, gaining experiences, and increasing knowledge'



Fardin 6 / 14  
Jul 17, 2013   #1
People attend college or university for many reasons (for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays attending to college or university is one of the most important issues for juveniles. Seemingly, every youth has attended or wishes to attend to university. Doubtless, there are lots of advantages in participating to universities. It seems to me that, three arguments and advantages are highlighted in attending to university. Benefits such as career preparation, gaining experiences, and increasing knowledge have motivated youth to attend to university.

First reason for attending to university, in my point of view is career preparation. These days, there are lots of competitions among people for occupying certain jobs in job market. Having adequate job is a dream for everyone. In order to apply for the better jobs, people, try to make their resume stronger than others. In the marathon of getting jobs, who have studied in universities have more priority than uneducated one. As an instance, while my cousin was looking for a job for more than six months, my brother applied for the certain job and immediately started to work, because he was a university graduated. Entering university make us an expert, and more skillful. Therefore, we can occupy better jobs.

Second reason in my idea, is gaining experiences. Living alone, while studying, lead us to gain majestic experiences. Usually, adolescents rely on their family and without their supports will be disappointed. Living alone for the period of life might be useful or detrimental. In some periods such as during studying in university, being far from family is not only difficult for students but also a pretty useful chance for gaining various experiences. In this time span, students can gain experience for manage themselves in adult life.

The last reason that I believe motivates people to attend university is increasing knowledge. Human being has desire for learning more, and always tried for that. In addition, in today's world with the mass of information, in order to expanding communication with worldwide people, every day we have to know more than yesterday. Attending to university performs an opportunity for learning new matters, such as cultures, literatures, various cults, religions, and a variety of popular subjects. Therefore, I am sure one of the reasons of attending to university is having thirsty for absorbing new information.

From my point of view, people have three main reasons for joining to universities, which are gaining experiences, career preparation, and increasing knowledge. Today, people think they can obviate these needs by attending to university. Therefore, most of the young people or even Middle Ages are studying in universities or wish to study.

jkjeremy - / 380  
Jul 17, 2013   #2
Nowadays attending to college or university is one of the most important issues for juveniles. Seemingly, every youth has attended or wishes to attend to university . Doubtless, there are lots of advantages in participating to universities . It seems to me that,three arguments and advantages are highlighted in attending to university . Benefits such as career preparation, gaining experiences, and increasing knowledge have motivated youth to attend to university.

First reason for attending to university, in my point of view is career preparation. These days, there are lots of competitions among people for occupying certain jobs in job market. Having adequate job is a dream for everyone. In order to apply for the better jobs , people, try to make their resume stronger than others. In the marathon of getting jobs , who have studied in universities have more priority than uneducated one. As an instance, while my cousin was looking for a job for more than six months, my brother applied for the certain job and immediately started to work, because he was a university graduated. Entering university make us an expert, and more skillful. Therefore, we can occupy better jobs .

Second reason in my idea, is gaining experiences . Living alone , while studying, lead us to gain majestic experiences . Usually, adolescents rely on their family and without their supports will be disappointed. Living alone for the period of life might be useful or detrimental. In some periods such as during studying in university , being far from family is not only difficult for students but also a pretty useful chance for gaining various experiences . In this time span, students can gain experience for manage themselves in adult life.

The last reason that I believe motivates people to attend university is increasing knowledge. Human being has desire for learning more, and always tried for that. In addition, in today's world with the mass of information , in order to expanding communication with worldwide people, every day we have to know more than yesterday. Attending to university performs an opportunity for learning new matters, such as cultures, literatures, various cults, religions, and a variety of popular subjects. Therefore, I am sure one of the reasons ofattending to university is having thirsty for absorbing new information .

From my point of view, people have three main reasons for joining to universities , which are gaining experiences , career preparation, and increasing knowledge. Today, people think they can obviate these needs by attending to university . Therefore, most of the young people or even Middle Ages are studying in universities or wish to study. [/quote]
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 30, 2013   #3
jkjeremy has provided you with very good feedback as to improve your writing and I hope you pay enough attention to the points he highlighted. I thought I'd tell you the my overall expression about your writing. I think you have an understanding as to how it needs to be structured as your essay contains essential features. Avoid repetition and improve your flow. With more practice you can aim at a good score. Also, include the purpose in your topic (e.g. TOEFL, IELTS etc.) . That helps others to align their comments with what those tasks expect.


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