Unanswered [6] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width Posts: 2

STUDY FOOD SCIENCE, SHOULD OR NOT? DISCUSS.


studyingabroad 5 / 10 5  
Jan 26, 2021   #1
Topic:
Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on other important subjects.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.



Answer:
There has been a controversy of whether students ought to dig in the science of food and its preparation instead of other subjects or not. This essay will discuss both views of this problem and point out my own perception.

On the one hand, opponents to the study of the science of food have some arguments. To commence with, food study will be believed to be a waste of time if it is brought in the official curriculum. This results from the fact that other important subjects is integrated with further reading about food and if learners know how to condense them, they will not have to spend some periods per week cramming this amount of knowledge. Instead, schools could held extracurricular activities which not only ensures to adapt the demand of food understanding but also reduces the students' burden while they have many subjects to study.

On the other hand, there are several reasons for the support of learning food science. Firstly, food has had a crucial role to play in since the existence of human hence people need gain some food fundamental knowledge in order to extract nutritions from it. Understanding about what a particular type of food contains, we can avoid mistakes when creating mixtures of food. To exemplify, given they can react detrimentally, garlics must not be combined with duck eggs while cooking. Secondly, wastes of food has been an intense issues virally happening all over the world. Therefore, students need to be raised consciousness about the importance of food and the situation that millions of their peer lack food supply so that every citizen has equal chance for normal development.

In conclusion, although each side has its own advantages, I raise my voice to the opinion that it is better for children to learn the science of food and how to prepare it. Personally, I think this will help us protect ourselves and solve global problems.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,301 3340  
Jan 27, 2021   #2
You have to be able to tell the difference between a debate, a discussion, an opinion, and a thought process when you read the original prompt presentations. These differences, when properly identified and referenced in your restatement, will allow you to gain a better TA score as you will be able to show not only English comprehension skills, but an analytical skill that allows you to identify differences in idea presentations. In this case, when the original prompt refers to "some people think" and "other people think", the two sides are not referring to a controversy. Rather the phrases indicate a difference in thought presentation or opinion. Therefore, the correct reference word should relate to synonyms for the thought or opinion presentation.

The biggest problem in this presentation is the missing 3rd paragraph that should have referred to the development of your personal opinion explanation. That is presented individually, after a comparison of the 2 public points of view as you are still required to offer a completely developed explanation for your reason, which must support one of the two points of view. The conclusion is not the place for that. The conclusion should be used as a mere closing summary of the previous discussion topic, reasoning points, and your personal opinion. These should cover 3 sentences at the very least.


Home / Writing Feedback / STUDY FOOD SCIENCE, SHOULD OR NOT? DISCUSS.