Studying abroad is one of the best ways to experience the culture of a country, to acquire more knowledge, to get career opportunities and intercultural development and to discover new strengths. I believe it would be a good idea for this to be mandatory for university students. For this reason, I would like to point out some good reasons with examples, why a semester abroad should be obligatory.
Studying abroad is one of the best ways to experience the culture of a country
Hey Mariel, your opening paragraph sounds alright. However, I would like to know what the prompt requirement or instructions from your instructor are for the development of this essay. You see, the opening statement needs to be an accurate paraphrasing of the original prompt so I need to be able to refer to the original instructions to do that. In the meantime, you can further improve the opening statement by removing the phrase that says "s. For this reason..." Just immediately tell the reader that you will be discussing reasons as to why studying abroad will be a good idea. I am not sure what kind of essay instruction you were given so I am not sure if you should be discussing the pros and cons of studying abroad. Please provide us with the original instructions so that we can offer you more relevant advice as to how to improve the paragraph.
Studying abroad is one of the best ways to experience the culture of a country, to acquire more knowledge, to get career opportunities and intercultural development and to discover new strengths.
Studying abroad is one of the best ways to get new experience about the culture of a country such as ,acquire more knowledge, career opportunities and intercultural development and to discover new strengths.
I believe it would be a good idea for this to be mandatory for university students.
unclear sentence >>> I believe that it will be good idea if the student having mandatory from university to learn about new culture of country.