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IELTS: Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element.


Linh Hoang 5 / 12 2  
Mar 25, 2014   #1
The degree of university seem like a good evidence to prove that you were able to work in some majors. After graduating high school, people usually going on higher level and achieve some signficant successes. However, in fact, looking back to the past, there are many typical models about stoping at high school or droping out university and become very famous by their talent. In my oppinion, studying at university is realy supported for our career later on but it is not main decisive element.

On the one hand, higher learning, better opportunities because we are taught fundemental knowledge and adapt easily to work in the future. For many countries, especially, those are possessed of traditional fondness for learning, children usually take University exam entrant as demanding of parent. Therefore, studying at university become a popular trend like a ensuarance of future career. According to major inhabitant, going to college has been nescessary in the mordern life. Let imaging that if you applied for a company and then you did not graduate, it would be unfavourable compare to other indicates in this situation.

However, everything has two sides. If you decided that spend time for experiencing real life rather than studying rigid theories at colleges, you might gain more practice knowledge. We must acknowledge that actual experience sometime become crucial factor for jobs. Or sometime, student after completing their study at high school, they must come to an university by their parent's decision. From my experiences, if you had no interest on studying, you could gain nothing. We can see examples like Bill Gate, Steve Jobs, both of them quited university then follow their passion and become famous and rich. Nevertheless, they always encourage people continuing their learning.

In conclusion, the answer is something in middle. We should combine studying at appropriate university and try to have more activities in real life as possible. University is where support for us in the future career. We will have both nescessary knowledge and soft skills which is significant benefit later.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Mar 26, 2014   #2
Have the habit of including your prompt in your post. So that others would know what it exactly expect from you and thereby provide you with more meaningful feedbacks :)

The degree offrom a university seems like a good evidence to prove that you were are able to work in some majorshave acquired necessary structured knowledge in your major. After graduating high school, people usually goingon higher level and achieve some signficant successes.pursue higher studies in view of bettering their career opportunities.
OP Linh Hoang 5 / 12 2  
Mar 26, 2014   #3
thank for dumi, you and Pahan always remind me about my prompt. Although he explain something for me, i still get some confuse. When i study writing, my teacher haven't mentioned to "prompt" yet. So, you can give me an example? For example, with this topic, if you include your prompt in essay, what it is?
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Mar 27, 2014   #4
"prompt" means your topic. So, what he and I both were talking about alignment between your writing and your topic. In simple words, you should not go out of topic. So, we need to have a look at your prompt (topic) so that we have a better understanding about what it requires from you. We, I mean myself and other contributors, check whether you stay with your topic or not.
OP Linh Hoang 5 / 12 2  
Mar 27, 2014   #5
Oh, i got your view after checking something. I dont pay attention on my subject, I always put my topic on it. But i dont know why it is changed. "Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element" is not what is wrote from begining of my essay, it just 1 idea in my essay. I always use topics in some Ielts book and always show requirement at the begining. Thanks so much for your help. I'm trying to find why my topic is changed as 1 sentence in my essay.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 27, 2014   #6
I'm trying to find why my topic is changed as 1 sentence in my essay.

Maybe your sentence was not clear and the moderator replaced it with a more meaningful one. Anyway, the prompt that Dumi and Pahan mentioned above is not that title only. This is the prompt that you should have posted with your essay:

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to reach successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

You can see that it wasn't included in your thread. Also, don't use "you" in academic writing.


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