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Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Life is like a race and we all are running in that race to win. To win this race, running is important. If we do planning only and don't run then, that will not help us to win the race. By this way, careful action in any work in life is important, only planning cannot help to success in life. Proper planning with careful action can help us to success in life.
Firstly, taking risk can teach us new lessons in our life. This will give us new experience of learning new things, where we can find our strength and weaknesses. We can find our interest in that work or activity. This will help us to improve our skills and work on our weaknesses. This will not always results success but, failure is the first step to success so, we should learn to take risk in our life to find our strength and weaknesses
Secondly, taking risks can help us to find new ideas and opportunities in life. We can also make a profit by taking risks. For example, in share market, people take risk and carefully invest their money and luckily they earn profit out of that. Second example, while playing, many times players have to take risk to win the match, even if he knows that he could not do that moves. No matter, whether they win the match or not, but they will have satisfaction that they tried. So, failure could also be the result of risks, but that does not mean, we should stop taking risk and keep ourselves away from new ideas and opportunities.
Finally, not every time will get the time to think and plan, so by considering positive points of risk, I think, success comes by taking risks or chance.
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us new lessons in our... step to success. So,
The reasons you provided are pretty good. If you could, change the sentence structure which keeps on repeating in meaning.
Thanks for your feedback.
I will try to rewrite my essay and post again. I have some questions about the reasons I provided. I think, these are not strong enough. Can you please suggest me some other reasons or other ideas? I have my exam after two weeks. I am confused about my writing. I do not understand what to do at this stage...? These are lots of mistakes..:( please suggest me something so that I can score high in my exam.
Thank you so much.
That was very useful. Sometimes, Its very hard to study alone, we cannot understand where we are..!! there is a need of guidance. That was really inspiring and motivating.
Ana, sometime it is very disappointing to learn new things as
It is time consuming and requires hard work. Learning new language is more
exhaustive and takes a lot of hard work. We freeze a lot
Of time while writing essay or delivering speech even in our native
or mother tounge. English is our second language. So do not get
scared . Take good things and forget others. It keeps you motivated and
Actually, You are doing pretty good compared to other EF users. Read and
write as much as you can . Websites like "byliner" features wonderful
essays in varieties of field. Opinion page of newyork times is very helpful for
essays. Just a suggestion!
Thank you so much dear all especially deepakbaniya. I totally agree with you, we need to take good things to keep ourselves motivated and inspired. And yes, that (byliner) site is also a great site. I will keep working on my reading and writing. thanks again.