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Summarize TED video : Bill Gates talk about mosquito, malaria, and education



mem77 62 / 93  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
Based on the TED video by Bill Gates with topic mosquito, malaria and education, we know that Bill Gates with his foundation tried to reduce amount of malaria case in many country, especially on development country. He said that this disease always give the infection to the child, which has 1 - 5 years old. To make it clear, he has a statistic during amount of the children were born, and amount of children were died before the age of five. At 2002, there are 135 million children were born and less than 10 million of them died before the age of five. He said that it was a phenomenal thing, which is one of those lives matters a lot. As a conclusion of his speech, he believes that we have to increase our efforts to make a deal on the destiny of next generation because they are the part of us to make a better life in the future.

PHA2016 39 / 38  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
Hello Mem77,

..., we know that Bill Gates He with his foundation tried (...) in many country countries, especially on of development country

He said that this disease always (...) child, which who has 1 - 5 years old

To make it clear, he has [shown ] a statistic during amount (...) children were died before the[ir ] age of five.

He said [according to Gates ] that it was a phenomenal thing...

As a In conclusion of his speech, he believes ...

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