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IELTS summary Aimee Mullins opportunity of adversity



Dioba 68 / 97  
Nov 16, 2016   #1
Every word has value and how we construct the value is depend on our way to delivered. Our language affects our thinking and how we view the world and other people. In fact, many ancient civilizations such as the Greeks and the Romans believed that to utter a curse verbally was so powerful, because to say the thing out loud brought it into existence. For several ancient civilizations such as the Greeks and the Romans are believe that a curse by verbal has a great power. She gives an example from his precious experience how powerful a word. When Aimee Mullins, a TED speaker, got broke in her feet, that's why he got a elastic bands in her feet to help built up her muscles. To motivate Aimee to more exercises, Dr P, a doctor who take care her, gives a simple ploy to her. He promise will gives amount of money to her if she did what she does not like did. Fortunately, the notion from the doctor affects to Aimee. It is represents that every word gives great power and impression for the audience depend on how you delivered your viewpoint and suggestions.

NinaJoesuf25 36 / 61  
Nov 16, 2016   #2
Every word has ITS value and (...) the value is dependHINGE on our way to deliveredDELIVER .
IT IS because toTHE WANT TO say the thingSOME WORDS out loud brought ...
... and the Romans are believeD that a curse by ...
... his precious experience REGARDING how powerful a word.
... broke in her feet, that'sTHAT IS why he got aAN elastic bands ...
He promise willTO GIVEgives amount of money to her if she did what she does not like didCONDUCT AN APPROPRIATE BEHAVIOR .
It is represents that (...) for the audience dependING on how you delivered ...
justivy03 - / 2265  
Nov 16, 2016   #3
Hi Dioba, below are additional suggestions for your essay.

- Every word has a value and how we
- construct the value is depends on our
- way to deliveredof delivering it .
- wasis so powerful,
- because to say the thingutter a word out loud
- broughtwill bring it into existence.
- For several ancient civilizations such as the Greeks and the Romans
- are believe that a verbal curse by verbal has a great power.
- ... his precious experience of how powerful a word is .
- got broke in her feet, that's why he got an
- He promise he will gives amount of money
- doctor affects to Aimee.
- It is represents that every word gives great power
- and impression forto the audience
- depending on how you delivered your

There you have it Dioba,as you can see, there's a few suggestions that will definitely help you to strengthen your essay and I hope you follow through.
mem77 62 / 93  
Nov 16, 2016   #4
Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!

Every word has a value and (...) is depending on our way to delivered .

Our language affects for our thinking and how we are viewing the world and other people.

...ancient civilizations such as the Greeks and the Romans believed that...

...to utter a curse verballyverbal curse was so powerful, ...

..are believebelieving that a curse by verbalverbal curse has a great power.

She gives an example from hisher precious experiences how powerful a word.

Regards


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