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Summary article_Your Birth Control Pill Might Raise Your Depression Risk


David54 15 / 22 1  
Oct 5, 2016   #1
A research in Denmark conducts a study for more than 1 million women and adolescent girls about their birth control. As the result, It shows that birth control has effect which is related with mood. Such as, pills and other types of contraception, which are potentially increasing the risk of depression. Furthermore, scientists from university of Copenhagen also have been performed a research for more than 1 million women ages between 15 and 34, based on two groups, users and nonusers of hormonal contraceptives. As the result, they found that women who using combination of contraception were likely to have been prescribed an antidepressant, so it makes the risk more high rather than nonusers. Therefore, this knowledge is important for women, in particular teenage girls to know about factors that related to this problem. And doctors also should have to socialize about this potential risk for their patient.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Oct 5, 2016   #2
A research in Denmark conducts a study for more than 1 million women and adolescent girls about their birth control.

A research institute in Denmark conducted a study involving more that 1 million women and adolescent girls about their birth control

... that birth control has effect which is related with mood INFLUENCED BY MOOD. BESIDES, Such as, IT IS ALSO RELATED WITH pills (...) of contraception [NO NEED COMMA] which are potentially increasE the risk of depression.

Furthermore AT THE SAME TIME/IN ADDITION, scientists from university (...) have been performed a research for WITH more than 1 (...) between 15 and 34, based DIVIDED on two groups,(...) contraceptives, AS PARTICIPANTS. As the result, they found that women who usE A combination of (...), so it makes the risk more high HIGHER rather than nonusers.

... in particular teenage YOUNG girls to know about factors ...
And [AVOID STARTING SENTENCE WITH 'AND'] doctors also should have ...


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