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TED summary Task Every Kids Need Champion



Dioba 68 / 97  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
Rita Pierson, a teacher, spent her entire life either the schoolhouse or the way to the schoolhouse. She is come from educator families, both of her parents are teacher. She taught since 4 decades ago. So she can look at education reform from other views. Some of those changes have been good but some of them have been bad. She argued that poverty, low attendance and negative influences are the common reasons of the kids drop out. She regrets why people never discuss about the value and the vital of human relations. She also said quotes from James Comer that no significant relationship will affected to zero significant learning. Furthermore, she told about her journey taught in which low academically class. She got essential point from his mother experiences. When her mother passed away and so many her mother students came to her funeral. The point is her mother left a legacy of relationships that could never lost.

mdamanhuri77 22 / 18  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
She iscomecame from educator families,..
So she cancould look at education reform...
Some of those changes havehad been good but some of them have been bad.
... and negative influences arewere the common reasons of the kids dropdropped out. She regretsregreted why people never discuss ...
... Comer that no significant relationship will be affected to zero significant learning.

hi dioba,,tha's a;; abou my advices for you,,keep writing properly yeah
andika_soppeng - / 15  
Sep 29, 2016   #3
She is come from educator families(THIS SENTENCE IS PRETTY CONFUSING TO ME SINCE YOU PUT 2 VERBS SIMULTANEOUSLY,IS AND COME .) She is comeS from educator(...) parents are teacherS. She HAS taught since FOR 4 decades ago . (SINCE IS USED TO MARK PERFECT TENSE) So

,

(put comma here) she can look at educationAL reformATIONS from other views.Some of those changes have been good (avoid high frequency vocabularies) but some of themRedundancy have been bad( high frequency vocabulary) .

She regrets why people HAVE never discussED about the value... ( NEVER IS USED FOR PERFECT AND FUTURE )
She got essential point from his mother experiences( THIS SENTENCE IS PRETTY CONFUSNG TO ME AND YOU NEED TO BE CONSISTENT AS YOU USE SHE AND HIS .

... away and

,

(PUT COMMA HERE)so many her mother studentsa vast number of students' mother came ...
... of relationships that could HAVE never lost.

note:

avoid using high frequency vocabularies
pay attention to subject verb agreement
attempt to utilize complex sentence
e.g: although SV, SV or SV although SV
enhance your lexical resource


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