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Summary Article : Selfish Dogs Would Rather play with a Toy than help a Human


Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 15, 2016   #1
Many people says that dogs are the best friend for human. In the reality, many dogs are more selfish. Dogs prefer to play with their toys than to help human or they do not understand the request from human. To find out about this thing, Piotti and Juliane Kaminski doing a research with 24 samples in the lab. Researchers test the dog one by one by putting a toy in one corner of the room and hiding a notebook which dog also see of another person using it also they put staplers. As the result, dog play often with their toy than the notebook then staplers. According to Clive Wynne selfish behaviour of dogs is not surprising actually. They are interested in an object that they like. Different opinion from Krista Macpherson, she said "Does the dog take an interest in an object that a human is interested in, or only in objects that dogs are interested in?The question is, how much understanding do the dogs have of these helpful behaviours?". Dogs are brilliant animals which can read human clues but without direction it will be difficult thing to do.

Link : newscientist.com/article/2100755-selfish-dogs-would-rather-play-with-a-toy-than-help-a-human/

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 15, 2016   #2
Hi Farida..
I have still found the grammar errors in your writing. These are my corrections to finalise the better result. You have to pay attention to the grammar because it takes a position at the criteria of the high score. You should meet these improvements.


Many people says that A dogs are the best friend for human. In the reality, many A LARGE NUMBER / PLENTY / A WIDE RANGE OF (You should not write "Many" frequently) dogs are more selfish. THE Dogs prefer to play with their toys than to help THE human or they do not understand the request from THE human. To find out about this thing, Piotti and Juliane Kaminski doing CONDUCTED a research with 24 samples in the lab. they put staplers STAPLES. As the result, THE dog playS often with their toy RATHER than the notebook

Note: Honestly, you should locate more time to read your summary. I have found a sense of your writing. Your flow cannot engage to get the point of your summary. I suggest you harness the linking words appropriately. After that, you concentrate use of the article. It is a grammar basic so that you can pass that. This summary contains a bit of repetitive (Frequently use MANY). Be careful of miss-spelling.

I believe that you will show your better efforts the next writing..
I am looking forward to meeting your writing.


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