The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table presents statistics on the network of underground railway of six cities across the world. Data is compared in terms of year of operation, length and annual ridership. Overall, London had the oldest and largest metro system while that of Tokyo had the highest capacity.
Specifically, the London underground was first opened in 1863, which was 37 years earlier than the operation in Paris, thus making it the only metro from the nineteenth century included in the list. Other cities began put their subways into service throughout the following century, with Tokyo, Washington DC and Kyoto respectively. Whereas Los Angles was the last one to feature this means of transportation in the year 2001.
By a fairly wide margin, the route length of London underground was higher than all of the remaining cities. Standing at 384 kilometers, the figure also doubled that of Paris. Meanwhile the Japanese city of Kyoto had the shortest route, extending to merely 11 kilometers.
Nevertheless it was Tokyo's subway that had the highest ridership (1927 million passengers per year). Paris came second at 1191 million passengers. Kyoto, in parallel with its small size, scored the lowest ridership, carrying only 45 million passengers annually.
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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Can you give specific mark to my writing based on four academic IELTS writing criterias? Much appreciation!
Here's my essay:
figures of railway systems in six cities
The given table presents statistics on the network of underground railway of six cities across the world. Data is compared in terms of year of operation, length and annual ridership. Overall, London had the oldest and largest metro system while that of Tokyo had the highest capacity.
Specifically, the London underground was first opened in 1863, which was 37 years earlier than the operation in Paris, thus making it the only metro from the nineteenth century included in the list. Other cities began put their subways into service throughout the following century, with Tokyo, Washington DC and Kyoto respectively. Whereas Los Angles was the last one to feature this means of transportation in the year 2001.
By a fairly wide margin, the route length of London underground was higher than all of the remaining cities. Standing at 384 kilometers, the figure also doubled that of Paris. Meanwhile the Japanese city of Kyoto had the shortest route, extending to merely 11 kilometers.
Nevertheless it was Tokyo's subway that had the highest ridership (1927 million passengers per year). Paris came second at 1191 million passengers. Kyoto, in parallel with its small size, scored the lowest ridership, carrying only 45 million passengers annually.
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