Who should take care of preschool-aged children teachers in childcare centers or their grandparents?

childcare centers or grandparents provide the best services for children of preschool age

There have been many controversial arguments that preschool-aged children should be taken care of by teachers in centers or their grandparents. While there are some advocates of childcare centers, I believe that it is better to grandparents' concern.

On the one hand, the argument that grandparents will be better care for their youngsters is reasonable to some extent. Firstly, the grandparents have lived for a long time and have brought up their own offspring so they have lots of experiences to take care of children. They know how to take care for both children's physical and mental health. Secondly, parents can enjoy peace of mind when leaving their children to the care of grandparents. They tend to spend much more time and effort caring for their grandchildren compared to childcare staffs.

On the other hand, I would side with those who believe that preschool-aged children are offered the greatest services at childcare centers. The first reason is that since those centers are professional organizations their teachers are trained well in order to communicate and take care for young children. There are also specialized facilities that encourage little students to engage in both games and lessons. In addition to, children become more sociable and confident to attend to schools because they know how to make new friends when they are at childcare centers. This is impossible if young children always live at home with family members.

In conclusion both each individual and our society are devoted to childcare. However, childcare centers always bring a lot of benefits.

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