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In the UK teaching personnel continues to be female-dominated at children's schools.



tyler1234 3 / 10  
May 2, 2016   #1
The bar chart shows the gender distribution of teachers working at various educational institutions in the UK in 2010.
In three of the six kinds of establishments, females outnumbered males. Female teachers made up a particularly high percentage of the teaching staff at schools for the younger generation: nursery pre-school and primary school. The gender gap was significantly large at nursery pre-schools, where there were twenty four times as many female teachers as male ones.

Men and were equally represented at establishments for younger adults: secondary school, college and private training institutions. College was the only place where there were the same numbers of males and females. Male teachers accounted for the majority of staff at universities (roughly 70 per cent).

Overall, the chart shows that in the UK teaching personnel continues to be female-dominated at children's schools. However, male teachers have a significant presence in places that teach the older group of learning community.

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Word frequencies: male, female, teacher-5;

I feel pretty redundant. I would appreciate if someone with this experience would give feedback. I can start memorizing synonyms that could be used on practice tests, but I'm not sure that would be of much help during the exam. PS: My test is at the end of this month.


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aviniwirastri 10 / 35  
May 2, 2016   #2
In three of the six kinds of establishments, females outnumbered males .

comments :
i think you miss something important. the task does not discuss about the teacher, but the students.
so it can go off topic.

the total number of males outnumbers females.

Men and women were equally represented at establishments ...
College was the only place where there werehad the same numbers ofbetween males and females. Male teachers accounted for the majority of staff at universities (roughly 70 per cent).

i think the task you uploaded is different with your essay. it has no correlation.
OP tyler1234 3 / 10  
May 3, 2016   #3
Sorry about that mate, here is the necessary image.
I would appreciate if you could give me a rough score


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