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Technological innovation is important / Reason


madalyalim 1 / 1  
Apr 5, 2013   #1
"Advance in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reason for your choice."

All technological innovations especially in transportation and communication make people's life easier. Airplane and telephone helped to people to connect to each other globally. These inventions took significant place in all nations' livings. Apart from those, other innovations such as Internet facilitate all part of people's life.

Internet plays considerable role in our life. First of all, Internet is an important way to interact with other people who are your citizens, even from other countries. You can contact with them and learn various cultures and different languages. You can communicate with them by e-mail or by voice call easily and cheaply. Moreover, Internet is a way to shop internationally. You do not have to go another country to buy something. You can order whatever you want in your office or at home. If you have something to sell like a car or house, you can sell these possessions via Internet in a simple way. Furthermore, Internet helps you in your study or working life. You can reach whatever you want in accordance with your study or work. For instance, all researches, books and essays can be found and read related to your studying or working subject. In addition, Internet is a way to entertain freely to some extent. You can watch movies, listen to music, play games on Internet. Not only you amuse by yourself, but also you make fun with your online friends. Lastly, Internet is a tool to save time. For example, you can transfer money, make shopping, pay your bills via Internet. Also you can do all public procedures online related to the public institutes.

In conclusion, Internet, as an important innovation, is sometimes library where you read and write, is sometimes shopping center where you buy or sell something and is sometimes amusement area where you watch movies or play games. It is always a means that helps you interact with others and to contact to your friends.

keen2edit - / 7 1  
Apr 5, 2013   #2
Hi. The internet is indeed a good choice for this essay topic! It's probably the most important advancement of our time.

A few grammatical and other suggestions:

These inventions took significant place in all nations' livings. = These inventions played a significant part in many nations world-wide.

Apart from those, other innovations such as Internet facilitate all part of people's life. = In addition to these innovations, the internet has helped to facilitate many aspects of life for many people. [Note that perhaps I wouldn't say all people as there are still quite a large number of people across the world who do not have internet access.]

In addition, Internet is a way to entertain freely to some extent = To some extent the internet also offers free entertainment.
make shopping = do shopping

For the conclusion, perhaps bring it back to the topic of how the internet has helped changed the way nations interact on a global scale. So write about global libraries, global shopping sites etc and how this all facilitates easy interaction between different nations across the globe.

Hope that helps, and good luck with the rest.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 12, 2013   #3
Airplane and telephone helped to people to connecttowith each other globally

. These inventions took significant place in all nations' livings.

These inventions have significantly contributed to better the living standards of people worldwide.

Apart from those, other innovations such as Internet facilitate all part of people's life.

For me, I believe that it is the Internet that supersedes all other technological inventions in the modern era. It has brought about great changes in to the lives of modern people and the way they interact with one another.

You can contact with them and learn various cultures and different languages.

Today, the Internet has removed many barriers, such as language, time, geography etc., in communication.


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