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Toefl: Technological Innovations that are important


elmar 1 / 3  
May 29, 2011   #1
Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way nations intercat with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

Since the 2nd half of the 20th century the technology has been growing raipdly and it has cahnged peoples`s life to a great extent and one of the most important innovations of technology is internet.

Internet has many benefits. It makes us our life to be healthier.Communication between patients and doctors has become easier,more personal and more flexible.Specifically patients can get reports from doctor with online.There are many web sites have about heath and medicine.Also everyone can get useful information about illnesses and medicines.

Information is probably the biggest advantage of internet.The search engines like Google and Yahoo where you can find any kind of information on any topic that you are looking for.

If you are student internet is also good for you, because teachers have started giving assigments that require research on the internet.With internet you can study online or you can talk with your teacher directly.For example you can sit at your home and study your lessons online also you can ask or email your teacher if you didn`t understand anything. Distance learning through the internet has created a big chance to learn while staying home or at work.I think it is the best option for those who can not attent school.

Internet has changed the world ecenomy.Because before the innovation of internet it was diffucult to follow closely the changes in different countries ecenomy.
Entertaiment is another reason why people prefer to surf the interne.For example downloading games,music,movies or visiting chat rooms.There are many games that we may download from the internet for free also we can listen to music or watching online movies.

Chat rooms are popular among the people because you can meet new and interesing people there
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 30, 2011   #2
Hi Elmar, I'll make some changes, and you can practice typing the sentences again to form good grammar habits:

Since the second half of the 20th century the technology has been growing raipdly rapidly, and it has cahnged changed peoples`s lives to a great extent. One of the most important innovations of technology is Internet.

I capitalized Internet, because it is a proper noun.

The Internet has many benefits.

It makes us our life healthier, improves communication between patients and doctors, and makes all communication more convenient and flexible.

Specifically, patients can get reports from doctors online.

There are many web sites have with information about heath and medicine.

CANNOT -- one word, not two words

typo: surf the interne.

Nice job! Keep practicing. Your English is very good!!!!!!
OP elmar 1 / 3  
May 31, 2011   #3
HI EF_Kevin.thanks for your help.I am so glad and I want to know that.how score will the give me if i write in my Toefl exam like that?

nowadays i am preparing my toefl exam.
Thanks again....
lovely Elmar
Coolmam9x 4 / 6  
May 31, 2011   #4
"Specifically patients can get reports from doctor with online" You only need "online". "with online" is wrong.
On the whole, I think you should only dig in some main important advantages of the Internet and explain them with more specific details instead of listing many of them and not developing well. Remember, a typical paragraph of Toefl should be from 3 to 5 setences. 2 is not adequate.

Moreover, if time allows, you should have a conclusion paragraph.
OP elmar 1 / 3  
May 31, 2011   #5
Coolmam9x thanks a lot....
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 31, 2011   #6
Okay, Elmar, practice by typing it again and using the corrections you got here. That way, you can form good habits and make sure you understand the correct grammar.

I don't know what score you will get, though... I don't know how they score the toefl. :-)


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