Writing Test : anti-society behaviors

Today, there is a great increase in anti-society behaviors and lack of respect to others.

What are the causes of this? Who would take the responsibilities for dealing with it?

What is Anti-society behavior? It is a deliberate action that harms or lacks of consideration for the well-being of people. It has also been defined as a conduct that violates the basic rights of people and considered to have disruptive actions for society. People who have anti-society behavior have a possibility of experiencing huge stimuli like money temptation, extremely high pressure, drugs and alcohol. The reason why they can't conquer the factors, we could say that growing environment is a crucial point to investigate.

People who have anti-society behavior appear some negative personalities. For example, they usually have bad tempers and get used to lie to others. Therefore, they don't trust people, but themselves. Sometimes they are dangerous and have mysterious attractiveness. It made me think of "Joker", the movie published in 2019. If you have watched the movie, then you can clearly understand that our society needs to face the issue of anti-society behavior seriously.

When our society starts to face up the issue, we need to know what makes the problem, who needs to take the responsibilities and how we can improve it. In the movie, Joker, we can know that Arthur, the main character, he is actually a good person who takes care of his mother, works hard and dreams of having his own comedy talk show. But he has got sick since he was little when he saw his mother was abused by her boyfriend. Thus, this disease made him laugh hard when he was under high pressure, he was seen as a psycho sometimes. People were not friendly to Arthur though he was trying to be good.

According to the third paragraph, I sort out three points to explain the caused reason and I continue to use the movie as an example. First, the family problems, Arthur was born in a complicated family with violence and loneliness. Second, the understanding, people didn't understand Arthur when he fell ill. The last, respect, people didn't respect each other. Therefore, they destroyed Arthur's trust and love to them. Arthur finally collapsed and turned into a really bad person, the nightmare of Gotham City.

There is no exactly who should take the responsibilities but everyone does. More understanding and respect will make the world peaceful and fill with love. We can't choose our primary family, but we still can be kind to ourselves and other people. Finally, we realize that Life is short, but life is yours. Making the right choice is an important issue in life. Spend more time to explore the world and out of the ivory tower. Be a happy person!

Since you did not specify which English test you have written this paper for, I will not be able to give you a focused review of this presentation. I will give you a general review of content and applicability of your discussion to the topic instead.

You have defined anti-social behavior in a manner that shows a Wikipedia plagiarism, having barely reworded the original definition as stated on the website. That is unacceptable in any form of academic writing. Unless you can cite the source of your information, plagiarism is still plagiarism, even if you changed one or two words to make it appear as your original thought. When left to your own devices in trying to explain the reason for anti-social behavior, your presentation falls apart due to a lack of central reason, an over generalization of your statement, or an improper English sentence structure. All of which make it clear, upon further investigation, that your first few sentences are plagiarized.

Your first sentence in the second paragraph, the topic sentence, is also unclear as you are missing the connecting phrase "to have" prior to the term "negative personalities". Additionally, you are making reference to a movie that not everyone may have seen, so it is important to classify the reason why you believe that "Joker", as a movie exemplifies anti-social behavior.

The focus on the movie, rather the general discussion about being anti-social created a prompt deviation which could be a problem in your final scoring consideration. As I do not know what type of test you are taking, I cannot be very specific about how this change of discussion will affect your presentation score.