As an English writing exercise, I appreciate the efforts you have placed into the writing of this short essay. Reading this from the point of view of a teacher, I can see the areas where you need further improvement such as adverb and verb usage, word usage, and sentence formation. Being a native English speaker, I will get a little bit frustrated while reading this because of the confusion that your weak English writing areas causes in the presentation. It is important that you pay attention to your vocabulary in particular because that is where your biggest writing problem can be found. For example:
You can experience... interesting parallel sentences.
This sentence was doing just fine until you got to the highlighted section. What is a parallel sentence? That is a confusing reference. Perhaps it is translated to English from your vernacular in this form, but it does not make any sense to a native English speaker. What exactly were you trying to say? You tried to use an advanced sentence presentation, but then failed to actually address a clear idea, affecting the coherence of the overall sentence.