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What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad? ielts writting task 2

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Jul 13, 2020   #1

formal academic training abroad

There are several ways for students to start their careers. Nowadays, study abroad is the most popular in some countries. It is a nice chance and I think it has more drawbacks than benefits. I will discuss this point in the following paragraphs.

People who decide to study overseas can approach opportunities to see the diverse culture include natural wonders, museums, or landmarks also, which they able to broaden their knowledge of the countries they were arrived at. Here is an example, Harvard University, located in Cambridge, their students represent for the fifty states and nearly 100 countries around the world.

In contrast, that is not easier to study in a foreign country. A more disadvantage in education abroad is that humans will be faced with especially in the beginning, is that they facing loneliness and they have to spend time getting used to it. Besides that, they might be paid a number of school fees. For instance, according to research by the International Institute of Education, studying abroad in a foreign country will cost at least $18,000 per semester or $36,000 per full academic year.

In conclusion, I am convinced that students have formal academic training abroad will have the biggest impact on our lives and we should be aware of them to protect yourself.
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Jul 13, 2020   #2
This is an incomplete Task 2 essay so it cannot be reviewed properly. You only provided 216 words for a 250 minimum word essay test. It will be useless to review the work at this point because the percentage of point deductions will not allow your essay to achieve a passing band score. So at this point, I can only give a general comment on your presentation.

It appears that you did not completely discuss the prompt requirements. The original prompt required you to discuss the advantages and disadvantages along with a personal preference regarding studying abroad. Would you want to it yourself? Why? When you present information in the essay, avoid mentioning any information sources. That is because you are being asked to discuss the topic from your personal point of view, public knowledge, and personal experience. The Task 2 essay is always based on non-researched material. So , although you can say anything you want with regards to the information, never mention an information source as you did in this essay. Always frame it from a public or personal point of view instead.

So, the errors in this essay are:
- Lack of prompt instruction responsiveness
- Lack of personal preference discussion
- Lack of word count

Based on the missing elements, this is definitely not a passing essay presentation.

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