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About thirty per cent of travellers each year choose learning programs to be their holiday purposes.


rizaldohabibie 19 / 35  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
A new fashion of travelling which has become common for all layer of age is a trip that enjoy a different kind of travel: learning vacations. According to surveys, about thirty per cent of travellers each year choose learning programs to be their holiday purposes.

This program includes, first, honing ability in the artistic endeavours with professional trainer supervising the tourists. Secondly, travellers can attempt to acquire the material of traditional cuisine from the myriad cultures. Next, travellers who go to Britain, they can enrol in courses at residential colleges that contain activities from intellectual to the performance such as photography and dancing.

These are just a few example of the many types of learning vacation. This program must be more economical than the conventional vacations. Moreover, it will be really useful to enhance travellers' ability rather than just have fun in the traditional vacation.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hi Rizaldo..
Actually, your summary is a good job. However, let me finalize this.


... common for all layer of age is a trip that enjoy ENJOYING(You should conduct reducing here to make this variation) a different kind
Next, travellers who go to Britain, they can enrol in courses at residential colleges that contain CONTAINING THE activities from ...
These are just a few exampleS of the many ...
This program must SHOULD be more economical than ...
... ability rather than just have HAVING fun in the traditional vacation.

Note: this is free of the macro errors grammatically. I only hope you can make yours more various. You can modify your word, using omitting or

reducing.
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