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[IELTS] Writing task 1, Three charts with average percentages in different types of nutrients


cacoco 1 / -  
Dec 15, 2019   #1

sodium, fats and sugars in american meals



Given are the pie charts illustrate the average percentages of three different types of additives added in food in the USA, which are sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar. If any of which consumed too much by people, it may be unhealthy to human body.

The chart of sodium demonstrate that people consume it the most during dinner, which made up to 43%, and it remain constant while having breakfast and lunch. Meanwhile, just as sodium, dinner also reveal the biggest portion of the chart, but there are a slight difference between snacks and breakfast, 21% for snacks and 16% for breakfast.

When it comes to added sugar, it is crystal clear that people consume it the most for snacks, and less for breakfast. At the end, it is interesting to find out people are having a nicer and healthier meal for breakfast, and tend to have an unhealthy meal for dinner.


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Hanip Abdul 2 / 2  
Dec 16, 2019   #2
You should write and paraphrase more simple and complex introduction, which can accommodate all the elements:
For example: the pie charts illustrate the proportion of three different types ... and added sugar in the various meals.

The chart ... demonstrate(s) that ...
..., but there are (is) a slight ...

When it comes to added sugar, it is crystal clear that ... for breakfast (majority people consume it mostly for snack rather than for breakfast). .

" I think you are still suffering of making compound and complex sentence, please open this website to help you more khan academy. and learn more about how to put your comparison sentence.


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