TOPIC: Technology in education

TOPIC: Some people believe that technology improves education, while others argue it causes distractions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The role of technology in education has long been contested. Advocates emphasize its ability to enrich learning and broaden access to information, while critics warn of its potential to distract students and hinder personal development. This essay will examine both perspectives before presenting my own viewpoint.

Technology undeniably enhances education by offering vast academic resources and enabling independent learning. Digital platforms, virtual classrooms, and online databases allow students to explore subjects beyond the standard curriculum. Additionally, technology promotes global collaboration-online discussions and shared projects foster cross-cultural understanding and prepare learners for an interconnected world.

However, these advantages are tempered by notable drawbacks. The lure of social media and digital entertainment often disrupts concentration, reducing academic efficiency. Moreover, excessive reliance on screen-based communication can weaken interpersonal skills, limiting authentic social interaction crucial for emotional and intellectual growth.

In my view, technology should be embraced but regulated within educational settings. Schools must implement thoughtful policies that curb unnecessary device use while integrating digital tools purposefully. When used for research, group work, and interactive lessons, technology can support learning and cultivate both digital literacy and self-discipline.

In conclusion, technology serves as both a catalyst and a challenge in education. Its impact depends on how it is managed. Through balanced and intentional integration, schools can ensure that technology empowers students rather than impedes their development.

In the last few days, i have been refining my writing skills according to your advice, with this essay being my most decent attempt so far. I have also altered my intro in a way that now presents my opinion instead of "coming to a reasoned conclusion". I would love to hear your honest thoughts on this. Thank you.

You will not gain any points for this statement because all you did was repeat the writing instructions. Review the prompt, you have to present your opinion based upon the pov that you support. This is even as you should be offering an opinion for each public reason that will be discussed in the succeeding paragraphs.


You are stating a personal opinion in this sentence. It is not supported by any information from the original prompt. You have altered the original topic in the process and will therefore receive a failing mark for your prompt restatement. It is important that you restate the facts only as provided in the original or risk receiving a failing preliminary TA score, which means you will already have failed the test, regardless of how well you performed in relation to the other scoring aspects.

Your discussion format is incorrect as you did not use the compare and contrast discussion format in the paragraphs. It is not clear to the examiner if these are all personal opinions or if these are public discussion points. You failed to properly use the first and second person pronouns that would have helped bring clarity to the discussion and improved your GRA score. This is a non passing essay presentation when one considers the major scoring considerations that you did not meet.