In the developing world where the population keeps climbing up at a high rate,
Points are always deducted from the prompt restatement + writer's opinion section for every piece of information you add, as the writer, that is not supported or mentioned in the original presentation. Expect to get a failing preliminary task accuracy score for these additions to the restatement.
'one big traffic jam' compared to thirty years ago.
This is not a revised presentation of the original sentence. This is just a rearranging of the same words, which will be considered plagiarism and result in additional deductions.
the statement above
You do not need to indicate the position of the original statement. Just directly state if it is true or false.
What measures can governments take
You forgot to directly respond to this question in the writer's opinion paragraph. Your task accuracy with regards to that section will be considered incomplete.
As the world around us continues to develop
This paragraph does not have a point.
each of the citizens would first need to
The question was about government action. That should be the anchor sentence for this paragraph. The actual response cannot be a secondary reference.
The essay is over written at 353 words. The task 2 essay can only accomodate 300 words at the most during the 40 minute writing time due to writing finalization requirements.