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Traveling to get job . . Environment is the Victim


Mahrooo 3 / 6  
Mar 4, 2011   #1
Can you help me to check my essay, I have to submit it in a nearest time.

Nowadays, the chances of getting job are few as a result of small town. So, some of workers resort to travel for long distance to get a job. As a result of that there is traffic congestion and damage to the environment. in this essay I will look at several solutions that might government or companies work on them to protect environment and reduce traffic congestion .

Firstly, government can provide or increase public transportation and make workers about that and suggest to them to use it instead of traveling separately.. so, if they use it, the environment will not pollute in a big way as if they travel separately.

Secondly, some employees who travel depend their work on computer or internet so, government can let them to stay at home and finish their work online.

Thirdly, there are many companies have many branches , so they can transfer their workers to the branch where it is easily or not far to reach to it. For example, my brother work in Dubai airport customs department and he from time to time go and return. As a result of that, he presented transfer request to the them to transfer to Hatta customs which nearest to him. Now, he is far from traffic and sometimes he go with his friend together in one car to their work.

To sum up, it is important that government and company care about workers and environment and try to satisfy both of them. We don't want to lose them by traffic congestion and accident.

cathchen 4 / 16  
Mar 5, 2011   #2
Firstly, government can provide or improve public transportation. Not only will it create vacancies but also it will help decrease pollution.
coronaeffect 1 / 3  
Mar 5, 2011   #3
I think you should consider your very first sentence here. I guess what you are trying to say is that its getting harder to get a job in a small town nowadays.
OP Mahrooo 3 / 6  
Mar 5, 2011   #4
I mean how can government help workers to make the work easy to them because they are travel from city to city and it's remote to reach to it and cause polution and traffic.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 10, 2011   #5
This part needs a little change:

Firstly, government can provide or increase public transportation and make workers about that and suggest to them to use it instead of traveling separately. So, if they use it the environment will not be polluted as much as if they travel separately.

Practice typing the sentence that way.
And practice other variations of it. Like this:
So, if I practice English, I won't make mistakes as much as people who do not practice.

Capitalize Internet:
Secondly, some employees who travel depend their work on the computer and Internet, so government can let...

Thirdly, there are many companies have many branches , so they can...

To sum up, it is important that government and company companies care about...


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