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This article was written in the context of TOEFL's independent writing task.
Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To truly enjoy a vacation (holiday), people should leave their mobile phones at home.
Some people may think that a vacation will be destroyed by frequent interruptions caused by mobile phones. On the contrary, I hold the opinion that mobile phones today are so useful that they can actually improve our enjoyment in a vacation.
To begin with, the functionality of navigation provided by mobile phones is pretty helpful when people are traveling in an unfamiliar area. With such a convenient utility, one can even avoid spending a lot of time previewing the map before their trip. Take my best friend, John, for example. One time, we had a trip together to Tainan, where was quite far from the city we lived in, Taipei. That was the first time we went to there, so I repeatedly checked with the driver, John, about the routes in Tainan. However, he told me that it was enough to only briefly browse the map and had a rough impression in mind. Google Map will take care all the remaining jobs, he said. In the second night, we went to a restaurant that is famous among the local people. Even though the restaurant located in a lane surrounded by complex routes, by using the Google Map on John's mobile phone, it did not take us too much time to find it. In that experience, John's mobile phone indeed saved our time, and allowed us to spend the time enjoying the trip.
In addition, the functionality of camera provided by mobile phones can serve as a way to reinforce the enjoyment of a vacation. The fact is that taking photos can not only remind people the moments during a vacation in the future, but also provide people with the possibility to create their own artwork. Another experience in the trip I had with John to Tainan can further function as an example to demonstrate such idea. In the third evening, we went to Moon Mountain, which is known for its amazing scene of sunset. I was totally lured upon seeing it. Therefore, I have taken several pictures of the view by the camera on my mobile phone. In addition to the fun derived from the process of creating beautiful things, they made it possible for me to appreciate the beauty of the sunset in the later days. I even sold out the best one among my creations on the Internet. The fact that someone recognized my ability did fulfill me.
In conclusion, in terms of the powerful functionalities of navigation and camera, it is definitely true that the quality of a vacation can be tremendously boosted by the assistance of mobile phones. As a result, I disagree with the statement. I believe that people must bring up their mobile phones in their vacations.
This article was written in the context of TOEFL's independent writing task.
Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To truly enjoy a vacation (holiday), people should leave their mobile phones at home.
Some people may think that a vacation will be destroyed by frequent interruptions caused by mobile phones. On the contrary, I hold the opinion that mobile phones today are so useful that they can actually improve our enjoyment in a vacation.
To begin with, the functionality of navigation provided by mobile phones is pretty helpful when people are traveling in an unfamiliar area. With such a convenient utility, one can even avoid spending a lot of time previewing the map before their trip. Take my best friend, John, for example. One time, we had a trip together to Tainan, where was quite far from the city we lived in, Taipei. That was the first time we went to there, so I repeatedly checked with the driver, John, about the routes in Tainan. However, he told me that it was enough to only briefly browse the map and had a rough impression in mind. Google Map will take care all the remaining jobs, he said. In the second night, we went to a restaurant that is famous among the local people. Even though the restaurant located in a lane surrounded by complex routes, by using the Google Map on John's mobile phone, it did not take us too much time to find it. In that experience, John's mobile phone indeed saved our time, and allowed us to spend the time enjoying the trip.
In addition, the functionality of camera provided by mobile phones can serve as a way to reinforce the enjoyment of a vacation. The fact is that taking photos can not only remind people the moments during a vacation in the future, but also provide people with the possibility to create their own artwork. Another experience in the trip I had with John to Tainan can further function as an example to demonstrate such idea. In the third evening, we went to Moon Mountain, which is known for its amazing scene of sunset. I was totally lured upon seeing it. Therefore, I have taken several pictures of the view by the camera on my mobile phone. In addition to the fun derived from the process of creating beautiful things, they made it possible for me to appreciate the beauty of the sunset in the later days. I even sold out the best one among my creations on the Internet. The fact that someone recognized my ability did fulfill me.
In conclusion, in terms of the powerful functionalities of navigation and camera, it is definitely true that the quality of a vacation can be tremendously boosted by the assistance of mobile phones. As a result, I disagree with the statement. I believe that people must bring up their mobile phones in their vacations.