Unhealthy activities in modern society

Science tell us some activities are good for our health and there are some unhealthy activities. But millions of people still do those unhealthy activities. Why? what can we do to change this situation?

fighting bad habits

My answer:
Today, the science development helps us know what action is good and what is bad for our health, but there are many people keep doing unhealthy activities. There are a number of reasons behind these activities and several solutions should be done to change this reality.

There are two primary reasons why people still do bad things even have been warned that it is harmful for their health. Firstly, activities such as smoking, drinking, drug,... are hobby of many people. Ordinarily, if someone is addicted with cigarette, he could not give up it easily. In addition, many youngsters follow trends such as using Shisha, playing dangerous sports as Parkour, eating poor diets,...because they want to express themselves to others or keep pace with hot trends. Secondly, in many countries still exist outmoded traditions from a long time ago such as cure diseased by drinking ashes water or beating patient with a whip to drive ghost away. In many cases, people even believe in shamans rather than doctors.

There are two solutions to solve these problems. On the one hand, parents need pay more attention to their children and advise them to stay away from their negative health habits. Meanwhile, government should promotes and raises public awareness of the damage of the harmful activities to health by some measures such as limit drug's advertising, fine people who smoke or play dangerous sports at public places,..... On the other hand, the state and health organizations need carry out campaigns to change the old view of healthy in some underdeveloped areas by support free medical services.

In conclusion, there are several reasons behind that many people still do unhealthy activities, and this problem should be solved by both family and society.

I like your essay, I think you should discard the full stops before 'on the other hand'

Hy, you are writing an academic paper, not a creative writing class narrative essay. Therefore, you should not be using ellipses (...) in your writing as that is an artistic writing approach and has no place in academic writing. Always write in complete thoughts and paragraphs. Do not wax melancholic as these special characters tend to indicate in any writing form. Always speak to the examiner in a direct manner. Say what you mean, don't expect him to fill in the blanks because he doesn't have the time to be analytical of your writing.Over all, you wrote some pretty acceptable reasons and suggestions. It is just weakened by the presentation that you chose to use.

With regards to your opening statement, aim to present at least 3 sentences so that you are sure that you were able to properly paraphrase the original instructions. Remember, the opening statement will be used to score your English comprehension skills. So be as detailed as possible in your interpretation of the prompt requirements. Just make sure you don't go over 5 sentences to complete the paragraph. Do the same for the concluding statement. It should summarize the full discussion essay that you just wrote so it can't be only a one liner at the end of the essay.