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IELTS Task 1. University graduates, Canada, 1992-2007


Misnariah Idrus 19 / 35 4  
Apr 15, 2014   #1
Hello, I'm in preparation of IELTS. Pleas help me with this essay!! ^______^

The line chart regards to comparison rate of Canada university graduates in men and women from 1992 to 2007.

As an overall trend, it is clear that the graduate numbers inclined during one and half decades and the gap between the number of men and women grew extensively from year to year. Furthermore, woman always dominated the proportion of the graduation.

A more detailed, look at the graph reveals that the growth experienced fluctuation. The graduate numbers increased steeply between 1992 and 2001, and the ratio between male and female was flattened as well thus showing less marked difference. In 1992, only below 100,000 females and 70,000 males graduated from university and considered as the lowest number graduations over those 15 years. After 2001, however, those numbers saw an extremely stronger increase than those seen in the early 1990s then continued to reach their peak in 2007.

Clearly, the trends of both female and male graduations were similar, but females increase a bit more quickly.




dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Apr 15, 2014   #2
The line chart regards to comparison rate of Canada university graduates in men and women from 1992 to 2007.

You need to improve the presentation of this intro. Look at Pahan's suggestion. That is how you should present your intro.

The graduate numbers increased steeply between 1992 and 2001

This is wrong interpretation :( The numbers increased steadily form 1992 to 1995 and then fell again. Again it picks up from 2001 onward for both genders. You should not misinterpret the trends. In the detail paras you need to discuss about every small thing in detail.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 15, 2014   #3
The line chart regards to comparison rate

... I am afraid that regard is not appropriate word in this reporting task
here I get from my dictionary which mentions regard as verb

regard verb[ T usually + adv/prep ]
1. to consider or have an opinion about something or someone
ex: Local people regard this idea of a motorway through their village with horror.
Her parents always regarded her as the cleverest of their children.

2. formal : to look carefully at something or someone
ex : The bird regarded me with suspicion as I walked up to its nest.

3. as regards formal
in connection with
ex :There is no problem as regards the financial arrangements.


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