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The usage of electrical devices and the number of hours used for housework per household; IELTS 1


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Aug 3, 2022   #1
Task 1, Ielts writing, line chart

The changes in ownership of electrical appliances



The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts given illustrate the usage of electrical devices and the number of hours used for housework per household in one country over a period of 99 years.

Overall, the proportion of electrical appliances used rose over the period shown. The proportion of refrigerator and vacuum cleaners took the lead in 2019, with 100% households using both devices. At the same time, the number of time spent on housework showed a reversed trend.

In 1920, no household used refrigerators. By contrast, the proportion of people using washing machines and vacuum cleaners was much higher, with 40% and 30% respectively. Over a period of 99 years, the percentage of households with electrical devices climbed dramatically.

All the households in that country utilized the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner, nearly 70% of households used the washing machine.

Regarding the amount of time spent on housework, the trend was a fall. In 1920, people spent 50 hours per week on housework. The trend then showed a rapid decrease. In 2019, only 10 hours was employed for housework per week.

The charts given illustrate the usage of electrical devices and the number of hours used for housework per household in one country over a period of 99 years.

Overall, the proportion of electrical appliances used rose over the period shown. The proportion of refrigerator and vacuum cleaners took the lead in 2019, with 100% households using both devices. At the same time, the number of time spent on housework showed a reversed trend.

In 1920, no household used refrigerators. By contrast, the proportion of people using washing machines and vacuum cleaners was much higher, with 40% and 30% respectively. Over a period of 99 years, the percentage of households with electrical devices climbed dramatically.

All the households in that country utilized the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner, nearly 70% of households used the washing machine.

Regarding the amount of time spent on housework, the trend was a fall. In 1920, people spent 50 hours per week on housework. The trend then showed a rapid decrease. In 2019, only 10 hours was employed for housework per week.



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Aug 3, 2022   #2
Please post only one version of the essay next time. Multiple postings in the same thread will result in account suspension if done repeatedly.

When indicating a plural number for the images, mention the actual number and the separate image title as clear reference points in the summary. This will help to add to the authority of the summary presentation. It will also help create the necessary mental picture for the reader. The writer will notice that the trending statement has lost clarity because of the lack of proper image separation in the summary overview. Once the reader is confused, the score will generally be less for the GRA score.

The discussions are not well developed enough over 4 paragraphs. The presentations are too short to be considered truly reflective and analytical of the information provided. No paragraph should be comprised of one sentence or two sentences alone.

As an analytical essay, this is poorly developed and written. The writer must focus on proper information presentation in his succeeding task 1 essays.


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