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Task 2 : The Way To Have Healthy Lifestyle essay


Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Aug 28, 2016   #1
Healthy life style is the most pivotal issue in sophisticated era. Some people argue that these days bring the real consequence for human's lifestyle especially food trend since there are a great deal of hyperpalatabe-food which people have a tendency to consume. However, I strongly believe modern era precisely tend to build well-educated society as it provides a plenty of information relating to how should people make healthy lifestyle so that people can implement this information.

Food plays an essential role in modern era. This may be due to the fact that plenty of people represent food not only for daily human need but also as the way of human life. For example, the result of recent study showed that the trend of highly engineered food increased significantly in the last 10 years as many entertainers in television program consume this food in their daily life such as burger king in friend television program. Subsequently, some people make their idol as primary role model so that they imitate the diet lifestyle in their life.

On the other hands, it should not be forgotten that a contemporary world also gives a great deal of information so that people can be educated. It has a high potential to create well-educated community since people can find reliable information relating to healthy food. The dangers of junk food, for instance, it makes people aware that this nourishment has a carcinogenic risk. As a result, some decide to avoid this meal and make a good deal with food issue by consuming a healthy food such as organic food.

To sum up, despite the fact that modern world brings a serious issue by making junk food as human's lifestyle, actually it is easy for people to overcome this trend by finding credible information relating to bad lifestyle then they implement the information in the real life.

madmoiselle 21 / 33 5  
Aug 29, 2016   #2
the most pivotal issue in today sophisticated era.
some people make their idol as a primary role model

Hi Iforsa, your essay is good but i find that you use too many "so that" in your essay, i think you can change it to other words such as "therefore" " in order to", etc it makes your essay sounds better. Good Luck!
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 29, 2016   #3
Hi Miss Sofy.
I have read your writing closely. Actually, I need the question of yours in order to give me the track of matters in the writing. Fortunately, I found that statement.


Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Based on the statement, there is a doubt that you have explained out of the topic.

Some people argue that these days bring the real consequence for human's lifestyle especially food trend since there are a great deal of hyperpalatabe-food which people have a tendency to consume.

The instruction asks you to discuss two opinions about whether having the healthy lifestyle is difficult orf not. However, you review about the way to have the healthy life, especially the food.

Actually, you have shown a positive progress rapidly grammatically. Besides that, you have explained clearly and interestingly. Nevertheless, your score still falls down as you have explicated another topic. You cannot get the score more 5.5 because this is so different of the prompts of task response. Please, you call your attention to the task response. You are supposed to need the time to analysis the statement so that you can find the major and minor keyword. All are going to help you being the right track as those are guides to construct the sentence by sentence. Hopefully, you can focus on the substance of the question the next time.

Keep spirit.
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