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TOPIC:
As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is natural and right for a company to make money in its professional field. I partly agree that the company is responsible for giving feedback to the society, while some bosses could not afford the extra cost of social affairs if the companies have been in a bad situation.
It is absolutely reasonable that an enterprise earn as more income as possible. It have to bear the weight of several necessary cost as soon as running whole company to make profit. For example, there is a cost of salary for every employee committing himself into work;and employer would not be trusted anymore if he does not pay wages on time, which may become a underlying problem for the company's future. In the long term, manager must lead company, all personnel, toward the right direction so as to ensure the sustainability of company. Investing in new equipment or better techniques, and expand the scale of factory are all important and definitely essential for a company's development. In other words, running and keeping a company require lots of money.
However, nowadays the condition is very harsh and competitive for a company in such a globalized society. It is challenging to survive from the competition with other enterprises all around the world, not to mention having additional expenditure of social responsibilities, such as financial aid for local student. A company should not be blamed or criticised just because it should take more social responsibilities than to sustain itself. On the other hand, as long as a company have the ability to help society, it of course should do it. Since without the resources and supports from people or organizations in society, it is impossible to success for an enterprise. Therefore, the decision maker has to evaluate whether there are enough time and money to bear the social responsibilities.
To summarize, making money is the first priority for a company.As to benefit society, however, is important as well if it is affordable for an enterprise.
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I am preparing for IELTS now.So if there is any suggestion, I will like to hear.And thanks a lot for read all of it!
TOPIC:
As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
business contribution to the society
It is natural and right for a company to make money in its professional field. I partly agree that the company is responsible for giving feedback to the society, while some bosses could not afford the extra cost of social affairs if the companies have been in a bad situation.
It is absolutely reasonable that an enterprise earn as more income as possible. It have to bear the weight of several necessary cost as soon as running whole company to make profit. For example, there is a cost of salary for every employee committing himself into work;and employer would not be trusted anymore if he does not pay wages on time, which may become a underlying problem for the company's future. In the long term, manager must lead company, all personnel, toward the right direction so as to ensure the sustainability of company. Investing in new equipment or better techniques, and expand the scale of factory are all important and definitely essential for a company's development. In other words, running and keeping a company require lots of money.
However, nowadays the condition is very harsh and competitive for a company in such a globalized society. It is challenging to survive from the competition with other enterprises all around the world, not to mention having additional expenditure of social responsibilities, such as financial aid for local student. A company should not be blamed or criticised just because it should take more social responsibilities than to sustain itself. On the other hand, as long as a company have the ability to help society, it of course should do it. Since without the resources and supports from people or organizations in society, it is impossible to success for an enterprise. Therefore, the decision maker has to evaluate whether there are enough time and money to bear the social responsibilities.
To summarize, making money is the first priority for a company.As to benefit society, however, is important as well if it is affordable for an enterprise.
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I am preparing for IELTS now.So if there is any suggestion, I will like to hear.And thanks a lot for read all of it!
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