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Women should not marry in their teen years



carito15 4 / 5  
Feb 25, 2013   #1
instructions: Write an argumentative essay about marrying young

In the past women were expected to marry young and be in charge of the house, so they could not even think about getting a degree, having a job or their own company. Nowadays, the role of women has changed and they are generally treated equally to men. Women have their own goals and objectives in life; they have many more opportunities and face different challenges. Because of that, women should not marry in their teen years.

As a positive consequence of the changes that the role of women has suffered, most of them have their own priorities and goals: travelling around the world, getting a degree becoming a professional woman, among other things. When a woman is married, priorities necessarily change and achieving all these goals becomes an impossible task. All their personal dreams are generally postposed and as the family grows it is more and more difficult to fulfill them.

Moreover, unlike in the past, nowadays women have access to education; they can do a degree course and become a professional woman. This allows them to have their own job and to progress in life. It also helps women to be financially independent, making them capable of supporting themselves. But marriage life makes everything more difficult. In this case women not only have to study and work but also to be in charge of the family and raise the children.

Finally, all the fact previously mentioned, do not mean that women should not marry, because in the end the most important goal of most women is to start a family. But waiting to get married allows them to grow up professionally and personally and to be ready to face marriage life in a mature and responsible way.

phatz025 3 / 6  
Feb 25, 2013   #2
All their personal dreams are generally postposed delayed or even set aside and as the family growsas a result of a growing family, it becomes even more difficult to attain. it is more and more difficult to fulfill them.

Good conclusion. :)

because in the end the most important goal of most women is to start a family.

You can probably change the word "in the end" into ultimately

But waiting to get married

In addition to that, delaying marriage
Victoria_123535 - / 2  
Feb 25, 2013   #3
If you get married in the teens thats a problem im not saying its a bad thing its just are you ready for this to take a big step im mean yall are still kids you still have things to explore. Come on you are still kids you you might find some else who treats you better or is more your type.Be married in the teens is like having a baby in the teens its a big responability. Just think twice before you move foward.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 26, 2013   #4
Because of that, women should not marry in their teen years.

State it in a way so that you stamp your idea.
Because of the changes in the woman's world, I believe they should not marry in their teen years.

This allows them to have their own job and to progress in life.

I don't think progress in life is a good phrase.
This allows them to have their own job and helps them climb up the co-operate ladder.

But waiting to get married allows them to grow up professionally and personally and to be ready to face marriage life in a mature and responsible way.

I think you have a very good ending. :) nicely balanced.

It might be an idea to use a few examples. Such as the medical field. In the past women were not allowed to become doctors. And there are plenty of other examples still today.


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