Write a paragraph (110 - 150 words) about what job would you like to choose in the future.

becoming a teacher

Since I was a child, I have been dreaming of becoming a teacher. I have got the enthusiasm to be a teacher from my father, who is a teacher too. Being a teacher means that I can have the chance to widen my knowledge to give my student the best information. To become a well-qualified teacher, I need to improve my presentation skills so that my students understand what I am teaching them. Furthermore, I must acquire some essential skills such as patience, diligence and good qualification in education. I am still improving my skills day by day to pursue my dream. To sum up, I want to be a professional teacher by the time I have grown up.

You do not really prove that your father's occupation and your exposure to it influenced you to become a teacher. You speak of your ambition in a nonchalant manner. There is no real interest development or enthusiasm for the job. It is almost as if you just researched information about the job and required training the wrote about it. The writing is boring and you appear distanced from the work choice. As if you were influenced in your decision and told what to write. This is not a convincing statement at all. It is empty in terms of a personal connection with you. It does not appear to be your true occupational calling in life.