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IELTS TASK 2: Too young children (e.g primary school student) should not study online. Discuss



Nguyenducvinh23 1 / -  
Oct 22, 2021   #1

Online school and children



In this day and age, distance classes are ubiquitous, mostly every student once experienced this type of learning. In fact, there are countless debates over whether elementary school students are suitable for online classes or not.

On the one hand, many people support that online learning is suitable for primary school students because they are not only convenient but also appropriate to the actual situation. Indeed, the advocate argues that distance learning is advantageous for too young students, when these students attend online classes, they will be comfortable about their space and time of studying, which might promote their studying interests. Moreover, if primary school students have difficulties in learning online, the parents, siblings aids are available for them, these assistants are believed to make them study more efficiently.

On the other hand, the opponent holds a belief that online classes are just a waste of time. People who are against studying online affirm that even if primary school students appear at traditional classes, the students' abilities to acquire lessons are still vague, so the critic believes that when too young students take part in online classes, the effectiveness is significantly decreased.

To sum up, it is safe to assert that the students' studying effectiveness totally depends on themselves. The online or offline classes are just one of a range of factors to help them study efficiently.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Oct 23, 2021   #2
The main reason the essay fails to meet formatting requirements is the word count. There are only 227 words written. Where less than 250 words are used in the discussion, a word count percentage penalty will apply. These deductions tend to be the main reason for score failures specially in the TA section. The prompt provided is incomplete. There are 2 ways this essay could have been discussed:

- Discuss both views and give an opinion
- Discuss your opinion.

Based on the present format, it appears that the first format is what is required for the discussion. So, it is the personal opinion paragraph that is missing and, as such, is the reason why the word count was not met. The essay can therefore, only receive a score based on an incomplete reasoning presentation. Such types of scoring considerations do not result in a passing score.
david2004 2 / 5  
Oct 25, 2021   #3
@Nguyenducvinh23
You should pay more attention to your word count. You should expand it by adding at least one sentence to each of your paragraphs (make sure that it always contains 2-3 sentences for your opening and conclusion, 4-5 sentences for each of the body ones).


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