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'Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city'.


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Jan 3, 2022   #1

leaving home or city for better education or a job



One of the conspicuous trends of todays world is that people are migrating to other city to fulfill their requirement. There is a widespread worry about related to this situation. however, good things are always followed by bed things as well. In this essay I will going to prove my point.

In this modern world many people are in hurry to grave their chance and for this they need to go out of their home place. There are many village or place where students can not found proper situation to study, so they need to go for other city. Further more, student get chance to learn many things like they will do each and every things themselves and it help them to become independence. To illustrate this, many students come in Kathmandu to study or to find job from village area and they need to search room themselves and job as well which give them experience about it.

On the other hand, there are many people who leave their house for study or job may caught by bad people or bad company. There are other many pressure to leave in new place, which is hard to handle by teenager, so bad people can easily brainwash them. According to survey held by education department maximum percent of drug addicted people was comes from teenage people.

In the view of the argument outline above, leaving home or city for getting higher education or in search of job will give many positive advantage whereas, there are number of people who get manipulated by bad company and forget their aim of life.
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Jan 4, 2022   #2
people are migrating to other city

People is a plural reference to "person". "City" is a singular reference to "Cities", the plural form of the word. You must use consistent numerical references. Singular references for singular statements, and plural statements for plural subject references. Points lost for grammar knowledge and word usage accuracy.

There is a widespread worry about related to this situation.

Prompt topic deviation. The original prompt merely referred to a question of the advantage or disadvantage of this topic. There was no worry nor debate about it. You will lose points for misinterpreting the original topic in your restatement.

In this essay I will going to prove my point.

Points lost yet again for not answering in the required format. Do you see this as an advantage or disadvantage? You need not use flowery words of wisdom, you need to be direct to the point and clearly responsive to the task question.

First and primary scoring consideration for the essay response has already failed at this point. It leaves the exam taker with very little leeway to pass the test. It will be next to impossible due to lack of grammar control, obvious lack of English comprehension skills, and incorrect opinion statement format. There is no sense in reviewing the rest of the essay since it has already failed to meet the minimum passing requirements.


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