It is undeniable that people are running after many fashion trends
This is the writer's personal opinion that is unrelated to the question posed in the original prompt. It will not receive a scoring consideration as a part of the accuracy of the topic restatement.
Some arguments may think
There is no other argument provided so this should have simply been restated in the essay prompt section factually. There are no other public opinions to be considered. The writer's opinion is not a part of this restatement presentation.
And I agree
Incorrect response format as it is missing the measured response or emotional reference of support for the given opinion.
Overall, the prompt restatement + writer's opinion will definitely fall short of receiving a passing score. It does not meet the passing score requirements for this section.
Since the writer is being asked to defend his own opinion in the discussion paragraphs, he should be referencing himself using first person pronouns throughout the essay. This is keep the discussion clear in reference to being based on his personal opinion alone. He should not be attempting to speak for other people or using second or third person pronouns in this essay. This is further evidence of incorrect discussion formatting.
Overall, despite some positive scoring potential in the minor sections of the scoring rubic, the writer errors as listed above will still prevent a passing score achievement.