|How I overcame my fear of public speaking - UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile
3 - Karin, one of the major points that you have to make with this essay is why you felt the...
UndergraduateanxjsoHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|My experience of selling samosa taught me to be optimistic... UBC Pharmacy
3 - Alsa, the first thing that you have to change in this essay is the reference to "we". The essay...
UndergraduatetarotoHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|Home Benefit after return, intended plan of study
3 - The first thing that you need to do is figure out what kind of national or local problem you...
EssaysKnockoutHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|A paragraph with quote for my analytical essay about why does Christopher like math
3 - Jakob, you can always run a search for a quote regarding that short story. There are actually websites like...
EssaysJakobVronskyHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|Mini-essay for my UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.
6 - The new 2nd paragraph is better focused, even though it is not as lengthy as we hoped it could...
UndergraduatedavkangHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|Letter of Motivation for Quality & Operation Management Graduate Course
9 - @Holt Thank you very much Holt. I will omit the last paragraph as you suggested. I...
GraduateStreetwalkerStreetwalker - Jan 15, 2017
|Essay opening description help - College experience
NEW - Hello everyone, can someone please help me with the opening description of this supplement. a perfect college ...
|If you are smart, you'll always be humble. NTU scholarship essay
7 - Yee, your anecdote doesn't work well with the essay because there is no clear event that portrays your belief...
ScholarshipellyyeeHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|FASHION INSTITUTE OF TECHNOLOGY - Creative Photography Essay
5 - Olivia, your narrative focuses too much on the photography journey that you are taking. Now, depending upon whether or...
Undergraduatelgates12Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Application Essay - Describing Experience which taught me about myself and/or those around me
6 - Christopher, it is alright for you to use the same response for different essays in different university and college...
UndergraduateCDuke93Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
5 - Thank you ayuriska. I will write more essays and I hope to receive your correction :)...
Writing Feedbackhongnguyentp92hongnguyentp92 - Jan 15, 2017
|UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile, Unfamiliar Situation
5 - Karin, The situation and solution to the problem that you discussed both times is too elementary and does not...
UndergraduateanxjsoHolt - Jan 15, 2017
|Why is Organic Foods better choice/ The pupose of Organic foods then process foods
NEW - The purpose to eat Organic foods, and not processed foods....
|Looking for a way out - Alcohol Intervention
3 - Xinyi, if you are already a college student or a high school interested in writing, your school, college, or...
Writing Feedbackxinyi0913Holt - Jan 14, 2017
|Home Benefit of Commonwealth Scholarship - Nigeria
5 - Good revision. You covered all of the major points required to create a notable post study plan. However, you...
ScholarshipKnockoutHolt - Jan 14, 2017
|My friend need some information about my country for visiting
5 - the transportation-> The transportation (I think you should add "Furthermore, Apart from, etc. So I think the letter will...
LettersTrang Lenguyenlykimngan1 - Jan 14, 2017
|USC supplement: when I'm exposed to a new perspective
5 - @Holt Thank you! I'll add a little more development. Anyway, thanks a lot....
UndergraduateBennyooooBennyoooo - Jan 14, 2017
|This is an essay for admission to an American university for masters in construction management.
15 - Ratan, the purpose of your enrollment in the masters degree in Construction Management course is still not clear in...
Graduateratan251294Holt - Jan 14, 2017
|Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000
3 - That is definitely not a good overview. It would be better to make a clear overview, to show the...
Writing Feedbackayuriskakrempetkov - Jan 14, 2017
|Too much of financial dissonance in this world
4 - Your structure is good. On the other hand, you have made many grammar mistakes and I think you should...
Writing Feedbackfidel123krempetkov - Jan 14, 2017
|It is important to rest the mind during leisure time.
4 - Chau, while your essay speaks of valid reasons for resting the mind during leisure time, it fails to take...
Writing FeedbackChau TranHolt - Jan 14, 2017
|Writing 2: people think instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it
4 - Arlen, the discussion of colonizing Mars does not fall under the topic of living with climate change or dealing...
Writing FeedbackArlenHolt - Jan 14, 2017
|To what extent you agree with the idea that some teenagers lead an unhealthy lifestyle?
2 - Hello Liu! Hopefully my feedback is helpful for you. I've considered your points and read your essay as...
Writing FeedbackCaliabiCDuke93 - Jan 13, 2017
|Your course of life, your view of life, study background, your hope & wishes.
15 - Thanks Holt... It is if I applying to embassy. Since my plan is applying to university, I just...
Scholarshipdigaprasiskadigaprasiska - Jan 13, 2017
|You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house and forgot your coat containing some belongings
2 - Jaya, if you are going to make up information about the value of the coat, saying you left your...
Writing FeedbackjaikrishnaHolt - Jan 13, 2017
|Personal Statement - Management Science / Business Tech / Analytics program
4 - I am not sure about what else can be added in terms of the "Why school" part of the...
Graduatetz35Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|Aspects of Colorado College which attracted my attention. Why this College?
2 - Batjin, the essay that you developed is well thought out and really displays admirable reasons for wishing to attend...
Undergraduatel3atjinHolt - Jan 13, 2017
|Writing Task 2 opinion's people about internet using
4 - Hello, I found you list lots reasons to support one statement. I think it would be better if...
Writing FeedbackFiza26Arlen - Jan 13, 2017
|Besides the economy, there are many types of progress worth our attention as well.
4 - @ngokhoa99 Thanks for your correction and I have a question that whether to have an example in essay is...
Writing FeedbackArlenArlen - Jan 13, 2017
|The proportion of telephone calls in the UK
2 - Ayu, please remember the capitalization rules for proper nouns. When you are discussing the nationality of a person such...
Writing FeedbackayuriskaHolt - Jan 13, 2017