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GKS-G 2023 PERSONAL STATEMENT -The first time I knew I was meant to be a dentist-

4 - The essay is super long for that kind of personal statement. It is too wordy which makes the reader...

Graduateyaz010997111296 - Nov 10, 2022bunikjun - Nov 11, 2022
IELTS TASK 1: Time spent on smartphones and tablets, by category.

2 - The word "graphics" could indicate numerous image types. It is not specific enough to describe a task 1 image....

Writing Feedbackdqhuy3108 - Nov 9, 2022Holt - Nov 10, 2022
Are senior homes the best places for the elderly?

2 - The writer has misrepresented the original discussion topic in the prompt restatement section. Since there are actually 2 points...

Writing FeedbackHuong Pham - Nov 9, 2022Holt - Nov 10, 2022
Are Parental relationships improved if fathers take time off work after the birth of a child?

2 - The concerns of women regarding dealing with problems after pregnancy are well documented. These are actually publicly discussed, rehashed,...

Research Papersarawondar - Nov 8, 2022Holt - Nov 8, 2022
The potential dangers. Do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

3 - @Hunne i would be great if you represent your ideas linked with the information about it in order to...

Writing FeedbackHunne - Nov 7, 2022Kjavier - Nov 7, 2022
The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart

3 - As usual, people often write their Overview in the last paragraph?...

Writing Feedbacktrang0912 - Nov 7, 2022Maria_Ph - Nov 7, 2022
Energetic, hardworking and ambitious - great participant in the Global UGRAD Program

2 - The essay is too self centered. Being a Global UGrad participant, the applicant should show a sense of community...

ScholarshipKjavier - Nov 7, 2022Holt - Nov 7, 2022
Women are more prone to developing the autoimmune disease hypothyroidism than men are.

2 - The magic phrase in this essay title is "than men". The existence of this phrase means that the research...

Writing Feedbackdentalluisa - Nov 6, 2022Holt - Nov 7, 2022
Statement of Purpose for a Masters in Compuer Science / Data Science ETH Zurich

2 - The student has written an effective personal statement, which disqualifies this paper as a statement of purpose. It is...

GraduateBiiigie - Nov 6, 2022Holt - Nov 7, 2022
Combatting Cyberbullying, Depression, and Suicides - English 102 Lesson 11 Essay

2 - The first paragraph has too many rhetorical questions that lead to a misleading thesis statement. State facts rather than...

Research PapersBradleyQuinn17 - Nov 6, 2022Holt - Nov 6, 2022
Does Mindfulness-based Mediation Ease Anxiety Symptoms?

2 - As a reader, I would need the writer to clarify the difference between basic meditation and mindful meditation. Are...

Research Paperspsteventurner - Nov 5, 2022Holt - Nov 6, 2022
Binge Drinking: Is It Really Worth It?

2 - There is a big difference between alcohol and an alcoholic beverage. The writer should make sure to use terms...

Research Paperskellysw4 - Nov 4, 2022Holt - Nov 5, 2022
Research Paper Rough Draft - Culpable Mentality

2 - The premise of the essay is lacking in terms of the background of culpable mentality. One can assume that...

Research PapersRChughes0408 - Nov 4, 2022Holt - Nov 5, 2022
Mini essay-UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.

2 - We need a more relatable backstory for this. As a customer service agent, it was not really your task...

Undergraduatedeafleaf - Nov 3, 2022Holt - Nov 4, 2022
Towards accomplishment - UBC - 1. Tell us about who you are. Personal Profile essay

2 - This prompt actually asks the applicant to write about himself from the third person perspective in 3 settings: as...

Undergraduatesh103150 - Nov 2, 2022Holt - Nov 3, 2022
[ielts writing 2] Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads.

2 - The essay could have been longer in terms of discussion explanation and better formatted in terms of presentation to...

Writing FeedbackLanternna - Nov 2, 2022Holt - Nov 2, 2022
Dream and the efforts made in order to achieve it. KAIST Entrance Essay

3 - @Holt Thank you for your detailed feedback!...

UndergraduateBelayed - Nov 2, 2022Belayed - Nov 2, 2022
LOR for student applying to Msc Data science

2 - A letter of recommendation for a masters course often comes with a prompt from the university the student is...

Letterslayla12 - Nov 1, 2022Holt - Nov 2, 2022
How I discovered public relations

3 - This essay was straight to the point just how it should be, it described how this shaped the writer....

Undergraduatebreezybunny135 - Oct 29, 2022almightytbo - Oct 31, 2022
Stacked against me - COMMON APP ESSAY - CRITIQUE

3 - I really enjoyed this essay, but I was a little confused on all these points and how they are...

Undergraduatejiyam - Oct 30, 2022almightytbo - Oct 31, 2022
Help me to write exemption letter

6 - @strangersth write your motivation letter and post it here for a review. Take note that the motivation letter could...

LettersSohaib799 - Aug 23, 2013Holt - Oct 31, 2022
How many retail stores were opened and shut down - cam 17 test 2

2 - The summary section is not complete. The summary should be composed of at least 3 sentences. It is never...

Writing Feedbacknguyentrang2809 - Oct 31, 2022Holt - Oct 31, 2022
IELTS TASK 2: Daily online purchases for basic necessities have proven its popularity over time

2 - The writer has not responded properly to the question. There is a single opinion that must be defended in...

Writing Feedbacktuyetmai2182004 - Oct 31, 2022Holt - Oct 31, 2022
The Physics Department - Why Davidson supplement essay?

2 - The main question is in relation to what you can contribute to the unique learning experience at Davidson. All...

UndergraduateAryan1234 - Oct 30, 2022Holt - Oct 31, 2022
e-health challenge * Leadership and influence

2 - This is a good start to responding to the question. As we both know, the Chevening scholarship is looking...

ScholarshipMamka - Oct 30, 2022Holt - Oct 31, 2022
"Hey fool, pass the ball" - common app - Recount a time when you faced...

NEW - I think life isn't a destination, like everyone says it is. "Keep working hard and you'll reach your destination"...

Undergraduatespeedram - Oct 30, 2022 -
[ielts task 2] Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching

2 - With only 252 words in this essay, it meets the word minimum requirement but not the full scoring considerations...

Writing FeedbackLaminate - Oct 30, 2022Holt - Oct 30, 2022
At Fordham, we expect students to care for and engage with their communities.

2 - The topic chosen for the discussion was promising but the writing approach Missed out on the potential to greatly...

Undergraduatenataliely - Oct 30, 2022Holt - Oct 30, 2022
Writing Task 1: Police department's sources of funding and allocation of funds.

2 - The current summary overview is confusing in terms of reference. Yes, the images were properly identified. That was good....

Writing FeedbackStarShallRise - Oct 30, 2022Holt - Oct 30, 2022
math and physics - University of Wisconsin-Madison supplementary essay review

2 - The essay is well written. It creatively uses an imaginative and engaging presentation that captures the reader's attention. Until...

Undergraduatejamie foxx - Oct 30, 2022Holt - Oct 30, 2022